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awesomesauce — failure at its greatest
Published: 2004-03-31 20:41:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 125; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 20
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trying to break freetrying to know why, and see
trying not to be
a failure
a nuisance
an enemy
taking all the risks i can
trying to live up, grow up and be a man
i just dont see how i can
be happy
live free
grow and be
that which is expected of me
to do what i can do
to fulfil my purpose
and turn into
that man
who is happy
unattainable. undescribable. repetative.
sinking. drowning. failing. wailing.
why can i be happy?
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Comments: 21
i want to know if i make you happy and change the avatar b/c i said so. call me tonight please
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well u havent been here.. and you dont write... and yeah u dont get online.. 
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I like this and I can relate to it very well (not the man part, but the being happy and growing up and wondering of the things I am supposed to fulfill).
They style is catchy as well.
I don't usually like rhyming poems but you did very well on this one.
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Hm.. two comments? This is odd. I don't understand my compuetr sometimes.. >.<
Well, since i'm takeing up even more for your space...
More roses for you.
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I know, i'm a freak. But thats why ya love me. Or hate me. Either one works.
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Nice poem, you've handled the subject well
Like the structure of the piece, particulaly the use of italics in the last line to make it stand out, and good rhythmic flow.
Well done
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