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Published: 2004-04-13 03:38:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 76; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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Description Excuse me if I prefer Dylan to Robert Frost,
BB King to L.Beethoven
or a sunset to painted cloth.

Forgive me too if I be just who I am,
when it seems like everybody
thinks I need to be like them.

Pardon me please if my tune might change it’s timing
or if form sometimes escapes
and not every lines a rhyming.

For it would be an awfully boring song if we all sang the same,
it’s differences that make us each unique
and keeps interest in this game.
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Comments: 5

vampyrechixie [2004-04-14 19:23:33 +0000 UTC]

I kind of like how this whole poem about how you write what you want and such invited crtitism on form...ironic

Its a good poem and it lends its from to the subject.

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pokes [2004-04-13 16:05:40 +0000 UTC]

Awesome work. I love the attitude you put into this. Definitely reminds me of something Dylan would sing about. I love how you kept it short and to the point. You just told it like it was. Great stuff!

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flacabajo [2004-04-13 03:40:46 +0000 UTC]

I enjoyed this poem! I really liked the rhyme scheme except for the second stanza. I think that is your weakest stanza of them all. The scheme doesn't seem to go right. However, if you were to tweak that just a little bit, this would be a wonderful poem!

Thanks for the read!

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bbent In reply to flacabajo [2004-04-13 03:51:53 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the read and your thoughts,had a problem with the second line but not the second stanza that i edited,it's more a dylan or woody guthrie kind of tune than a poem.if it's ever possible to post mp3's here i'll do that.appreciate you taking the time to reply.

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flacabajo In reply to bbent [2004-04-13 03:53:05 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome. I hope that your poetry grows!

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