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Published: 2012-02-11 02:11:08 +0000 UTC; Views: 561; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 6
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Description i ignore to implore the questions
i don't want the answers to,
because i know the effect of
exploring the gamut too soon.
though soon will never happen,
because never is all you believe,
and chances mean risks
you can't fathom to conceive.
so backwards seems evident,
moving forward like this. and yet,
i stand still, refusing to believe
all that's left unsaid. silence is not bliss.


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2/10/2012


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Comments: 36

AngelaLeonetti [2012-03-15 01:29:29 +0000 UTC]

has featured this amazing piece of art here [link]

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BeyondJen In reply to AngelaLeonetti [2012-03-21 04:43:28 +0000 UTC]

Oh gosh! Thanks so much. I'm flattered.

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AngelaLeonetti In reply to BeyondJen [2012-03-21 07:38:49 +0000 UTC]

your welcome

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Shyll-j [2012-03-10 16:09:20 +0000 UTC]

Bravo, very well done!

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BeyondJen In reply to Shyll-j [2012-03-10 18:30:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! I'm delighted you like this.
And thanks for the fave!

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beeswingblue [2012-02-12 18:24:19 +0000 UTC]

"silence is not bliss." Too true. Silence echoes in a way words never can.

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BeyondJen In reply to beeswingblue [2012-02-13 02:33:05 +0000 UTC]

See? This is not a difficult concept. I wish more people understood this.
Thanks, Lisa.

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beeswingblue In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-13 02:42:53 +0000 UTC]

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FuzzyHoser [2012-02-11 17:40:49 +0000 UTC]

I love the play on wording and all the contradiction that really has no business in the actual topic. Ya know what I mean? I think that sounded wrong..but I meant it in a clever way. Alas, I am not..as they say, with it, at this very moment.

Anyhow, you have impessed me.

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BeyondJen In reply to FuzzyHoser [2012-02-11 23:19:25 +0000 UTC]

I was really trying to work with the word play on this one. And yep, I know exactly what you mean. I have a degree in deciphering sick hosers. Indeed, you were clever.

And thanks, sweets. I always feel extra happy when I've managed to impress you.

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FuzzyHoser In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-13 23:55:21 +0000 UTC]

You're good, then. 'Cause I don't know up from now, right down....err, umm... Anywho, I very much like this one.

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BeyondJen In reply to FuzzyHoser [2012-02-14 02:58:31 +0000 UTC]

Thanks again, you.

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FuzzyHoser In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-14 03:05:20 +0000 UTC]

Mmhmm..

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IgnitionInStars [2012-02-11 16:14:21 +0000 UTC]

This plays on my thoughts lately.
Like a faraway echo that shouldn't overtake me.

Besides that, the ending is perfect as is.
And your writing is mesmerizing as usual

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BeyondJen In reply to IgnitionInStars [2012-02-11 23:17:11 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, you.
Gosh, you say nice things.

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IgnitionInStars In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-12 00:36:26 +0000 UTC]

Only cause I mean it

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BeyondJen In reply to IgnitionInStars [2012-02-12 07:11:10 +0000 UTC]

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Flermigan [2012-02-11 13:28:47 +0000 UTC]

Okay pieces like this really speak to me. Longing and want, it's just heart breaking but it makes for great writing. And I LOVE your simplicity of words. I can't tell you how much I love it, ha. Poems running around the point and bleeding metaphors that I don't fully understand drive me mad. (they can be wonderful, sure. but they drive me mad )

Wonderful

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BeyondJen In reply to Flermigan [2012-02-11 23:13:34 +0000 UTC]

I was afraid this one would sound too...angry(?)...and lose the longing and want, so I'm really glad you got that. And I'm definitely glad the simplicity of it didn't reduce this to a pile of crap.

I love metaphors and similes but sometimes you've just gotta be to the point. And yeah, sometimes I just don't get the metaphors, and it drives me mad too, 'cause I know I'm reading something pretty but I'm just not getting it! Grrr. Lol.

Thanks, you.

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Flermigan In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-12 02:04:01 +0000 UTC]

Hahah, exactly!! I know what I'm reading is pretty but I don't gettt ittt! Not all the time anyway...and chances are, we aren't meant to. This I get. Sometimes, it's the simple things. You're welcome.

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BeyondJen In reply to Flermigan [2012-02-12 04:24:53 +0000 UTC]

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GyptianOwl [2012-02-11 05:06:42 +0000 UTC]

Silence is not bliss.... so true!

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BeyondJen In reply to GyptianOwl [2012-02-11 20:25:37 +0000 UTC]

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meta-exposure [2012-02-11 03:06:45 +0000 UTC]

This is highly optimized code right here. Every word counts. It's elegant in its simplicity. Effective in its ability to generate questions.

Gosh, I'm nerdy today.

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BeyondJen In reply to meta-exposure [2012-02-11 04:21:05 +0000 UTC]

Yes, you're nerdy for sure, but I like it. And thanks for your comments. I'm glad this is making its point and generating questions.

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StormBringer23 [2012-02-11 02:48:52 +0000 UTC]

Silence is not bliss...needed to be said.

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BeyondJen In reply to StormBringer23 [2012-02-11 04:20:14 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, Dan.

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sunshinegypsy [2012-02-11 02:25:12 +0000 UTC]

Oh honey. Wow. This is really wrenching.

I love this:
so backwards seems evident,
moving forward like this. and yet,
i stand still, refusing to believe
all that's left unsaid.

But I don't think you need this, I think the poem already has:
silence is not bliss.

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BeyondJen In reply to sunshinegypsy [2012-02-11 02:46:15 +0000 UTC]

I struggled with whether to add in that "silence is not bliss" part. I wasn't sure about ending without the rhyme and messing with the rhythm. At first I thought the blunt ending was good. But then I doubted myself. Then I thought, maybe it actually needs to state silence is not bliss. But then it felt like I was stating the obvious. Heh. I'm going back and forth on it.

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KissTheSunrise In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-11 03:29:02 +0000 UTC]

I can love it either way.

Have you considered adding another line to preface it, or sorta merging the last couple lines to include it.
Just offering suggestions. I dunno ...fortunately I can't write for sh*t so my opinion doesn't count.

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BeyondJen In reply to KissTheSunrise [2012-02-11 05:16:59 +0000 UTC]

I think I'll keep that line. Thanks, sweets.
I might try messing with it a little more.

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KissTheSunrise In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-11 06:42:43 +0000 UTC]

OkieDokie as.u.wish.

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BeyondJen In reply to KissTheSunrise [2012-02-11 23:05:41 +0000 UTC]

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sunshinegypsy In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-11 02:49:26 +0000 UTC]

I get like that a lot. Esp if I start a poem with the last line and then when I finish writing the poem I find I don't ACTUALLY need the last line. WTF? Haha.

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BeyondJen In reply to sunshinegypsy [2012-02-14 02:45:59 +0000 UTC]

I don't think I've ever started a poem with the last line.
But I've heard a bunch of people do that.

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sunshinegypsy In reply to BeyondJen [2012-02-14 02:50:42 +0000 UTC]

Haha. Well, all my poems start from a single line or thought that I usually scribble down on a Post-It note or in my notebook or on the back of my hand. It can end up being anywhere in the poem. Beginning, middle, end. I never know until I start actually writing the poem. And often that line or thought doesn't actually end up in the poem at all. Weird.

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