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Published: 2007-07-24 07:08:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 781; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 1
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Description Outward show of inner lacking
Pretty dolls with jaws all slacking
Carbon copies all repeated
Little girls artificially sweetened

Dress them up and pull it tight
Make them into women of night
Daylight innocence forgotten
Children's minds today are rotten

Immoral lifestyles have been injected
Brain and mouth are disconnected
They don't need an invitation
All part of the bimbo nation

Media influence hard to ignore
Parents pushing more and more
Forced to comply and grow up fast
This is the way the dice are cast

Robot thinkers to fads of the moment
If its hip they have to own it
Will, intent, originality parsed
Free minds today are rather sparse

Too stuck in the world with its desire
Foul mouths drown themselves in fire
Minds set on sex and pretty things
Want it all with no work- to live as kings

Live on the edge, too many fall off
Class themselves with labels like emo and goth
Caught up in envies and with strife
They don't care; all that's at stake is life

They think its funny, drink and drugs
delinquent criminals, a bunch of thugs
Prove me wrong, I dare you
Are there many alive to their own thoughts? Didn't think so.
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Comments: 14

Furnosaurus [2007-08-01 11:34:44 +0000 UTC]

you really do hate drones don't ya

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BlackEnvy In reply to Furnosaurus [2007-08-01 13:02:54 +0000 UTC]

Intensely dislike let's say.

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Furnosaurus In reply to BlackEnvy [2007-08-01 15:31:05 +0000 UTC]

fairys muff

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Vanessanon [2007-07-30 00:28:46 +0000 UTC]

oh, i so understand! it kinda reminds me of Pink's song, 'stupid girls'. It's so true and even a quote in there from 2Tim3 i think? It captures kids of this world 2day so well

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BlackEnvy In reply to Vanessanon [2007-07-30 10:14:18 +0000 UTC]

Lol, I can't find the scripture I quoted the envies/strife part from, but definitely the whole theme of this piece is very 2Tim3

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ca3lum [2007-07-27 10:32:42 +0000 UTC]

again you've somehoe managed to put across your convictions so convincingly and i love the concept!!!!
i'm a big fan now!

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BlackEnvy In reply to ca3lum [2007-07-27 12:36:11 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for faving this as well

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shahath [2007-07-24 21:14:02 +0000 UTC]

I dig this one even more than the last. Not only does it have much of the same, as well as opposite, imagery, but it has the rhythm your other one lacked; your word choice blends well, I think. Nice.

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BlackEnvy In reply to shahath [2007-07-25 02:50:14 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I inteded specifically for this to have rhythm, whereas the last piece was designed to wander off somewhat. Designed for asking 'what if?' type questions at the end...well that's how I felt when writing it anyhow. Simulacrum was written immediately after my despite and anger were aroused, making it much more in-your-face; Envisioned Beginnings is more a thought trace or half memory intended to fade. I'm glad you liked this though

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shahath In reply to BlackEnvy [2007-07-26 00:05:09 +0000 UTC]

I liked it very much.

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Black-Roses-Fall [2007-07-24 10:16:33 +0000 UTC]

Agreed with above.. absolutely spell-binding with superb flow.

Instant fave.

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BlackEnvy In reply to Black-Roses-Fall [2007-07-24 11:05:28 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thank you very much for taking time to read it, and for the as well, it's appreciated.

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JoseyWales [2007-07-24 09:55:49 +0000 UTC]

Ooooooh I love this. Really well written, with proper venom in the rhymes and the way they lick. +fav +fav +fav!!!!!!

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BlackEnvy In reply to JoseyWales [2007-07-24 11:01:22 +0000 UTC]

Yay for venom! Lol just kidding...this was pure frustration at empty headedness compiled into words. Thank you for the

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