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I’ll never forget the sight of you standing there, your cigarette smoke mingling with the snow blowing around you. Your eyes were so sad in a beautifully broken kind of way; grey to match your world.We tried so hard to hold onto all we had, however little there was to grab. We never made each other happy, but our despair went so well together. Everyone could see how hopeless we were, but they all knew not to try to stop us.
Of course, something so fragile was meant to fall, and fall it did. Not even fall, implode. Our beautiful despair and grey eyes only got us so far before we ran out of any connection; grew so sick of each other we could no longer be near.
I can’t even look at you anymore without wanting to cry, to make time reverse and bring us back to then. Not to be happy, but to share our sadness, smoking to pass the time in our grey world, the world that no one understood but us. (And that was the way we liked it.)
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Comments: 20
Tige321 [2008-11-14 20:04:42 +0000 UTC]
;_; Another great addition. You ish my favorite writer ever.
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tinyplaidninja [2008-10-06 05:17:21 +0000 UTC]
yay for jelly!
i like the way you wrote, and the subject itself is pretty different. well, i feel like it is, anyway. The only thing I'm not sure of is the first line of the third paragraph...what if you said meant instead of made? I think that's what you meant, anyway.
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blameXmyself In reply to tinyplaidninja [2008-10-06 12:41:45 +0000 UTC]
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thanks. yeah, that's my least favorite paragraph. I think I will change that.
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tinyplaidninja In reply to blameXmyself [2008-10-07 05:52:43 +0000 UTC]
okee dokee.
oh and i'm not sure if you remember what i said about changing the whole smoking thing...just somethin' to think about.
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blameXmyself In reply to tinyplaidninja [2008-10-07 19:14:25 +0000 UTC]
yeah, I'll try to go over them one more time &then I'll bring them in
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tinyplaidninja In reply to blameXmyself [2008-10-07 23:46:13 +0000 UTC]
sweetness. it shall be an epic party of awesomeness.
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blameXmyself In reply to tinyplaidninja [2008-10-09 17:28:41 +0000 UTC]
I actually worked on the stuff for lit mag today :]
I shall bring it in tomorrow
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tinyplaidninja In reply to blameXmyself [2008-10-11 06:21:41 +0000 UTC]
you should go over it all again at some point and make sure there aren't other changes you want to make. just cuz.
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blameXmyself In reply to tinyplaidninja [2008-10-11 14:14:44 +0000 UTC]
lol hokay, will do :]
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MutePoetess [2008-10-06 01:01:56 +0000 UTC]
Wow.
Wow this is so beautifully written, I love it
Fantastic job =]
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blameXmyself In reply to MutePoetess [2008-10-06 03:08:20 +0000 UTC]
oh thanks :]
I've been trying different writing styles, but I'm not sure how they're working out
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MutePoetess In reply to blameXmyself [2008-10-06 03:44:16 +0000 UTC]
this one is really awesome =]
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