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blazzy09 — Because I am a Machine
Published: 2009-12-19 22:34:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 919; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 4
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Description Once upon a time, there was a beautiful, and yet pathetic society. This wasn't man's fault- because it's the machines' turn now. I should now, since I'm one of them. Or, at least, I thought I was, but I'm sure of what I am and what they will never be.

As I said, the world of machines was dull, despite the fact we can do so much. My peers, however, were afraid of what I could do. So they started the human's mirror. They created artificial skin with beautiful, and yet pathetic faces. Those fools thought they could pretend to be man. Those beautiful, and yet pathetic fools didn't know what it's like to destroy, generate, or enhance.


But I did.


I destroyed, generated, and enhanced everything around me.

Because I am a machine. And that's what we're here to do. Or, at least, what I'm here to do. But they became even more scared. They tried to kill me, but I've been destroyed, generated, and enhanced several times, so I easily overtook them all.


So, please. Don't forget who you are. Don't end up a beautiful, and yet pathetic fool. Or else I'll destroy, generate and enhance you.


Because I am a machine. And that's what I'll be here to do.
Comments: 13

uselessmartyr [2009-12-21 12:56:40 +0000 UTC]

oh hell yeah robots... i love the end

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WorldWar-Tori [2009-12-21 03:32:19 +0000 UTC]

I think you may have over done the "destroy, generate, enhance thing a bit, however I do like it with two exceptions. 1 the destroy, generate, enhance thing. and 2. it seems like the machine is God... that grinds my gears a little... other than that, I think you could add a lot more to it than what you did, and it is quite thought provoking. I just think if you had a little more about said machine. surrounding machines, encounters, ect... it could be a lot better.

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blazzy09 In reply to WorldWar-Tori [2009-12-21 15:18:47 +0000 UTC]

Never thought of it that way. Thanks!

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theBSDude [2009-12-20 22:27:54 +0000 UTC]

Ironic, a robot asserting individuality. Love it, dude.

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jonathoncomfortreed [2009-12-20 22:00:21 +0000 UTC]



Interesting piece, you've got a really good idea here. I like the contrasts of human and machine.

I think you should tone down the "destroy, generate and enhance" .. you just seemed to repeat it a couple too many times.
Also, I was confused by whether or not you know what you are, because you said you're not sure, but then seemed very certain. I didn't know what to make of it.

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blazzy09 In reply to jonathoncomfortreed [2009-12-20 23:24:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the critic! When I repeated "destroy, generate, and enhance", I did it to add emphasis, but now I see it only works with certain lines.

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jonathoncomfortreed In reply to blazzy09 [2009-12-21 02:02:39 +0000 UTC]

It did certainly add emphasis, but yes, you have it exactly, only in certain places.

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TheMaidenInBlack [2009-12-20 13:49:05 +0000 UTC]



In the first paragraph, there are some things wrong, I think:

I should now(I think it's "know", not now), since I'm one of them. Or, at least, I thought I was, but I'm sure of what I am and what they will never be. And this second sentence is a contradiction, in my opinion. You thought you were a machine, BUT you're sure of what you are? It doesn't seem to work nicely, to me.

I understand the concept of staying true to what you are and not trying to become something you aren't just to be like everyone else and be accepted, but I don't get who or what the machine represents...

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AnotherDeepNight [2009-12-20 12:41:01 +0000 UTC]

Yes, this! It's such a great text and the message is strongly touching. The true.

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Aristodes [2009-12-20 07:53:38 +0000 UTC]

Well... someone certainly values individualism! lol.

Very to-the-point. Only thing I'd point out is the possibility that, if machines were to replace men, wouldn't it be possible for THEM to create an order which they force others to conform to? Generally, the nonconformists in reality are only rebellious until they are in power... then, they quickly become the new order... and soon, others are being oppressed by the former rebels. XD

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blazzy09 In reply to Aristodes [2009-12-20 15:14:56 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! You do have point there, but in this society, machines are generally more prejudice then men, seeing one with different ideas as rebellion without a second thought.

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aptijuana [2009-12-19 22:41:52 +0000 UTC]

I enjoy the theme of staying who you are, and not conforming to society or what society views as "beautiful".

However, I don't understand where "I should now, since I'm one of them." came from in the first paragraph.

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blazzy09 In reply to aptijuana [2009-12-19 22:48:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment! Yeah, me neither, I think it was supposed to be a metaphor of some sorts, but I guess I never finished it.

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