HOME | DD

bleedingabcess — forgot
Published: 2005-06-18 04:18:29 +0000 UTC; Views: 76; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
Redirect to original
Description You took my heart,
right from my chest,
    but you forgot to put it back
and as i look,
i see a hole,
    where you forgot to stitch it up
when i land,
i hit so hard,
    'cause you forgot to stop me fall
and as i cry,
i wish i knew,
      why you forgot to love me too.
Related content

[ TEXT ]


bleedingabcess - the placebo children

bleedingabcess - ......

bleedingabcess - .......

bleedingabcess - bloody tears

bleedingabcess - prey

bleedingabcess - bunny3

bleedingabcess - mermaid

bleedingabcess - 3rd person former self

bleedingabcess - half and half

bleedingabcess - rock on
Comments: 10

kleptomermaid [2005-06-20 05:28:08 +0000 UTC]

i liek this one... its very you....
you need to find a cow heart to put in your person,..... that would be cool....
anyways....

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

bleedingabcess In reply to kleptomermaid [2005-06-20 06:56:56 +0000 UTC]

yay for hearts.. i was thinking. i coudl get formaldahyde from science to put hte heart in so itll last forever!

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

kleptomermaid In reply to bleedingabcess [2005-06-20 09:59:35 +0000 UTC]

hey... that would be cool.... and you could name it

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

bleedingabcess In reply to kleptomermaid [2005-06-21 07:30:32 +0000 UTC]

yay.. cant wait to start.. ooh.. we have art 2moro.. yes?.. oh NO! THEORY! *DRAMATIC SIGH*

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

kleptomermaid In reply to bleedingabcess [2005-06-21 07:57:50 +0000 UTC]

i think we r going on an excursion... i may be wrong..

👍: 0 ⏩: 0

unmasked-feeling [2005-06-18 11:00:25 +0000 UTC]

yeah, I reckon the end rhyme is good.. it gives a definite ending to the poem

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

bleedingabcess In reply to unmasked-feeling [2005-06-19 07:30:30 +0000 UTC]

topsh.. *pokes you to make you regurgitate her other poem*

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

unmasked-feeling In reply to bleedingabcess [2005-06-19 10:40:29 +0000 UTC]

*vomits all over you*
*sifts thru vomit*
THERE IT IS!

👍: 0 ⏩: 0

childofthekorn666 [2005-06-18 10:15:50 +0000 UTC]

I think the end rhyming works really well. This is so well written.

👍: 0 ⏩: 1

bleedingabcess In reply to childofthekorn666 [2005-06-19 07:27:32 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the crit.. ive been struggling on that line

👍: 0 ⏩: 0