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Blizz-Kid — Pandemonium
Published: 2008-08-24 00:20:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 573; Favourites: 12; Downloads: 11
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Description I have decided entropy
Will be my choicest palette
And chaos will the colours be
Indecision, sculptor’s mallet.

I will abhor laws, and design
Ignore all other rules
I’ll make my own, quite vast unlike
The work of kings or fools.

For poetry is not a game
That directions one can follow
The art is not a miracle cure
Some pill that one can swallow.

I’ll dance my words across the page
In no set rhyme or structure
Instead, use language most absurd
Expectations all shall rupture!

These lines of mine are quite unright
And drip with irony
For in ignoring all these things
These things have come to me…
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Comments: 12

NJPoetess [2019-08-09 07:15:06 +0000 UTC]

Reminds me somewhat of the Graveyard poets circa 1800's. Well-done

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12-Buttons [2010-02-16 06:43:41 +0000 UTC]

I love this. You're making fun of me aren't you

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literature101 [2008-10-27 14:16:33 +0000 UTC]

There is a nice flow throughout it. Puts my work to shame

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Blizz-Kid In reply to literature101 [2008-11-03 16:04:54 +0000 UTC]

I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

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Tend44 [2008-09-01 16:58:13 +0000 UTC]

That's beautiful

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fretbender [2008-08-26 14:20:43 +0000 UTC]

A very nice flow to this one. Well done!

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chubbyelf [2008-08-26 08:57:49 +0000 UTC]

This is really neat!

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DarkRiver249 [2008-08-24 16:42:27 +0000 UTC]

A strange mixture of rhyming quatrain and unrhymed, almost freeform writing. Unless I missed something. But it makes it more interesting. Personally "abab" or "abcb" quatrains get old and usually bore me after the first couple of stanzas. I like the ideas expressed also. Calls to mind "the pen is mightier than the sword". Let the poet lash out against expectations and ultimately produce a work of a quality that cannot be duplicated.

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Blizz-Kid In reply to DarkRiver249 [2008-08-24 18:47:30 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I liked playing with the irony that the poem talks about disobeying rules, and not following structure, but then follows a specific rhyme scheme and structure. It doesn't fit it perfectly, which is intentional.

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DarkRiver249 In reply to Blizz-Kid [2008-08-25 03:00:30 +0000 UTC]

Although somehow I can't quite figure out how to rhythmically resolve the final stanza.

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DarkRiver249 In reply to Blizz-Kid [2008-08-25 02:59:21 +0000 UTC]

Yes, the timing on the transition went well with the context. Also, it had a nice flow to it. Some poets are hopelessly inept when it comes to syllables and rhythm.

Of course, this poem would have worked either way, but I just thought I would comment on that.

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TheDibLuver [2008-08-24 03:15:42 +0000 UTC]

You have very good vocabulary and rhythm to your poem!

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