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Published: 2009-01-17 00:24:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 635; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 5
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I thought I sawyou on the street today,
a six-foot shadow
from the past.
You were standing
outside Starbucks,
looking in (though I
wondered why since
you donβt like
java).
I hurried toward
you only to find
a stranger
in a black blazer
standing where
you should have been;
he eyed me with
alarm then with pity
as I backed away
from him,
so I went inside,
ordered a
Caramel Frappuccino,
and cried in
my coffee.
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Comments: 62
FailureAtItsFinest [2009-01-17 00:36:12 +0000 UTC]
Urg, this one hurt. I've had that feeling too many times to count. Great, touching piece. Wish i was experienced enough to really give an in-depth analysis, but i'll leave that to the pros. But, in a plus, im just a simple-minded 15 year old, and i loved this piece. So you say what you need to say, and make it artistic, but simple enough that a kid like me can understand what you mean.
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Blueskye27 In reply to FailureAtItsFinest [2009-01-17 00:41:17 +0000 UTC]
Your comments/analysis are helpful just as they are. If you could feel it, I'm doing something right. I'm so glad you like it. Thanks.
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FailureAtItsFinest In reply to Blueskye27 [2009-01-17 00:45:08 +0000 UTC]
Well, thank you, and your welcome.
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Dark-Lilith In reply to ??? [2009-01-17 00:30:49 +0000 UTC]
Wow, this is great... it's almost like prose, but still has the rhythm to be poetry.
I think it's amazing. And you describe very well the feeling of thinking you have seen the ex... it always makes your heart jump in your throat.
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Blueskye27 In reply to Dark-Lilith [2009-01-17 00:41:49 +0000 UTC]
That's exactly what it's like, that painful jump... Thanks.
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Dark-Lilith In reply to Blueskye27 [2009-01-17 00:53:04 +0000 UTC]
it hurts, but it is a necessary pain in getting over someone. Lots of hugs are also needed!
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Blueskye27 In reply to Dark-Lilith [2009-01-17 00:57:25 +0000 UTC]
Oh, yes. Hugs are always good.
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