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Published: 2005-07-19 19:39:59 +0000 UTC; Views: 99; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Listen to my silent screamsHear me calling in my dreams
Living lives i cannot save
Walking paths as yet unpaved
No way back, escape this hate
No way forward, save the hate
I pull myself towards the end
Wounds growing which i cannot mend
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Comments: 17
thank you, im gald it came across like that and hopefully not too attention seekingly pathetic. sort of uncertain as well.
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this is really good, there is a good amount of emotion in the poem and the lines flow one into another so much better than your last one. i really like this and its definatly one of your best
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thank you! maybe its just the fac it rhymes
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I find myself stumbling through life, holes just getting deeper and deeper, problems just getting tougher and harder to sort out. Things just pile on.
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thank you! i know so true!
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very good! So that's why you wanted to know how to spell unpaved hehe.
It flows really well.
Can't think to write a detailed comment right now sorry.
I like it alot though. Keep up the good work.
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thats ok! yeah i didnt know, im rubbish at spelling!! im glad u like it, i was getting paranoid!!
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gdgd.
why were u getting paranoid?
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tis a long and paranoid story! maybe i'll tell u sometime.
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hehe okey dokey, I look forward to it.
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oh wow i like that
are you continueing it or leaving it like this?
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im not really sure. i generally write stuff like this kinda on the spurr of the moment so each one is slightly different, i guess at some point i should sit down and try and fix some of them together i just get scared sometimes that the rhymes would turn out forced or it wouldnt keep the same feeling. Obviously thats just me and it probably doesnt show but its something i have in my head! hee hee this is turning into an essay! thank you very much for the comment!
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you should try it some tim, even though you're scared. I mean atleats try cuz if you don't like you then you dont have to submit it or do anything. lol you can just throw it away.
i thought it was pretty cool and your welcome
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hee hee i can hide them at the back of my desk and never see them again!
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yup yup! 
lol its what i do!
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