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Published: 2006-07-25 12:41:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 294; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 5
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i keep my rose in teardrops,with ashes round her feet.
A blessed sense of knowing,
her conscience ever sweet.
And as my tears fall,
to glass so bright and clear.
Her beauty never showing,
her taste for all i fear.
You'd never know by glancing,
that she could be so vile.
But looking ever closer,
you see her twisted smile.
The water which she keeps for life,
my tears that rolled free.
They have become her growing thorns,
brewed by painful memory.
As she keeps on growing,
her water i'll provide.
Relieve those fearful nights again,
bring back the tears i've cried.
If only you could take my rose,
and burn her deep in hell.
But as i've got to know you,
my rose began to tell.
She sprang away from slumber,
twisted round with glee.
So now i know you'll never,
look close enough to see.
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Comments: 11
sumthig [2006-08-01 18:07:40 +0000 UTC]
i like it, i hope it wasnt bout me tho? missin u
matt
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bouncing-splitpin In reply to sumthig [2006-08-01 21:34:03 +0000 UTC]
no its ok. i miss you too.
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XmorbidbloodX [2006-07-29 21:56:10 +0000 UTC]
I really like that...It's kinda twisted...Beautifuly written and very...meaningful actually...It makes you think.
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XmorbidbloodX [2006-07-29 21:55:47 +0000 UTC]
I really like that...It's kinda twisted...Beautifuly written and very...meaningful actually...It makes you think.
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bouncing-splitpin In reply to XmorbidbloodX [2006-08-01 21:34:50 +0000 UTC]
thank you very much
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Dilznacka [2006-07-26 20:57:40 +0000 UTC]
seems to me that this person is being compared to a rose. it maybe pretty at first glance but painful to the touch and feeds on peoples pain to survive (tears being water to help a rose grow) anyways i like it very much. i like how you added "burn her deep in hell" even though it had a sinister theme throughout it was this beautiul sinisterity (is that a word?) untill you added that line. this is a little different from most of work but still not happy! im still waiting for a happy poem i know you have at least one in you. but dont force it wait for the write moment.
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bouncing-splitpin In reply to Dilznacka [2006-07-27 22:37:50 +0000 UTC]
thank you very much, i think its like having one inside or in your mind not quite sure. yeah different its a weird one. i promise i have one happy one at least, and probably a couple of weird ones! i will
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floatysheep [2006-07-26 15:45:52 +0000 UTC]
not 100% sure what its about but its really nice and lyrical! x
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bouncing-splitpin In reply to floatysheep [2006-07-27 22:34:55 +0000 UTC]
hehe me neither exactly kinda a different one. but thank you i think it has a certain ring to it.
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bouncing-splitpin In reply to lordbeazy [2006-07-25 19:24:37 +0000 UTC]
me neither, a very old piece of work but thank you very much.
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