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Published: 2005-09-08 20:57:20 +0000 UTC; Views: 72; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 1
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Description Stories left for you to follow,
sickened feelings all too hollow.
Entwined forever, paths to cross,
deep inside a sense of loss.
Choices throw my feelings out,
sowing the first seeds of doubt.
I struggle in the depths and cold,
words you told me all too old.
Nothing left to keep me here,
lost everything which i held dear.
Harsh brick walls i find again,
retreat into my home of pain.
Sometime i might find my way.
Sometime which eludes today.
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Comments: 4

hitchcockm00 [2005-09-09 22:10:47 +0000 UTC]

that;s really good. Nice rhyme and rhythm and I agree that the theme does hold all the way through.

Why so glum though?

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bouncing-splitpin In reply to hitchcockm00 [2005-09-10 19:29:29 +0000 UTC]

thank you, its an old poem so dont always take whats written to be my mood it'll b really weird when i get up to date! i had a pretty good day today actually

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hitchcockm00 In reply to bouncing-splitpin [2005-09-10 21:29:41 +0000 UTC]

hehe ok. You're welcome.

I slept all day today.

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lordbeazy [2005-09-08 22:36:08 +0000 UTC]

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bouncing-splitpin In reply to lordbeazy [2005-09-09 20:47:19 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much. hee hee maybe its just how i read it! i'll have a think. thanks again.

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