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Published: 2006-03-05 22:30:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 122; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 1
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At first in summer you see her beauty,reflections, refractions, shadows, light.
Shining thorugh enticing looks,
of skies so prefect, clean and pure.
Now in autumn inviting in,
to warmth and fires within her soul.
Shadows dancing, angels calling,
look deeper through the mists and fog.
Then in winter with freezing hands,
you trace the pictures on her skin.
Breath steamy to make it new,
leave her for the night to cleanse.
Now its spring and once again,
fresh and radient shines her light.
Perfection in fast moving rays,
of futures born here with new life.
Do you care if this window is broken?
How far through the thorns would you trek?
Wood decayed, glass broken.
Same window, same pictures, same girl.
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Comments: 13
a tad-bit confusing, but very well written.
(I think I'm gonna re-read it when I'm not sick anymore...I think then it'll make more sence...)
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awww i very much hope you get well soon
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Awww...thankies!!! 
ooook. I just re-read the poem and....I LOVE IT!!
(Yes, it is now not confusing...lol)
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awww tis ok.
hee hee thank you very very much, im glad it makes more sense!
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awwwwww in a good way hopefully, but thank you very much.
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I really like this, I've read it a few times now and I've only just realised that the stanzas are describing a window, I thought it was describing a person...and now reading it again I realise that is probably the case as well.
*starts again*
I really like this. I've read it a few times now and I've just realised that the description of the window is a metaphor for describing a person, I really like this and I think it works really well. The imagery is good.
I agree with micxx that the suddeness of the last stanza is effective.
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thank you very much, im glad that you understood what i was going on about! its kind of both yes because otherwise it wouldnt fit though its hard to draw the lines sometimes. thank you very much again. glad you enjoyed.
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You're welcome. Hehe.
ok.
You're welcome again
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I like the wonderful suddenness of the last stanza, it makes a point that everything is not how it seems. Its like looking through rose tinted glasses (which indeed make the world look better, as i have my own, have you seen them?)
Anyway I really like the way it goes through the different seasons and says how the girl is in each one. Its a well thought out piece. well done.
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thank you very much, i dunno if ive seen the exact ones but i have seen you wearing some amazing sunglasses! thank you very much again for the lovely thought out comment.
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thank you very much, it may be because the writing was done a little while after so thoughts had changed and it seems to be an overview almost.
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