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braceletsofsmoke — Dream or Reality
Published: 2003-09-05 19:00:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 190; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 14
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Only in your dreams am I realWhere thoughts bloom like budded roses
And monsters become your hunter
Alone, I'm left to lie in the streets
Where my worst fears dwell,
Ready to destroy me
So deperate to make me a reality
You keep me here - pleading
Bound and gagged I'm left without a choice
I cant escape - you cant even hear me screaming
You still hope that one day I'll be yours
But I'll be trapped in your dreams forever
Nothing I could say would impact your mind
so, quiet I'm going to be
And quiet I'm going to stay
Until you untie me
And set me free
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Comments: 10
Very beautiful. Very intense. There's great imagery in this piece. Good job ^-^
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Hey . . . I thought I've read this before and commented . . .
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So very deep and so very beautiful. Good job
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I love the way you did this sally, i love what youve done here. The poem is dark yet leaves you wondering the exact meaning. Great job and thanks for sharing, your a talented poet
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i think this is quite lovely. very deep. i really like the last four lines of the last stanza, though the first bothers me a little. i'm not sure why. but over-all, very nicely done.
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ohh i like it...a lot...really...it's very deep...
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Very good, I'd say. If you don't feel it's finished, keep working at it -- this is a very good piece, I think, and if this isn't its finished form I'd love to see a final one.
The first two stanzas are the best, imo, though the rest isn't bad -- if anything here needs any work, I suppose it would be those bits.
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