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Reibu Haruno made by me 
warning! you are about to read information about this girl that is due to this story's crappiness
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Name: Reibu Haruno

age: part1, 13-14 Part2, 16-18

parents: Mebuki Haruno and Kizashi Haruno

Sibiling/s: Sakura Haruno, Kiku Haruno ShadowHachia 's OC

Crush: Suigetsu Hozuki

Relationship status: Single/ Paired with Suigetsu in an AU

Sensei: Anko

Team memberspre-shippuden) Katara, Shirahime (Friend's OCs)

Affiliation: (Pre-shippuden)Konohakagure(shippuden) Team hebi/Taka

Backround story: Reibu was once a young girl in the Academy, it was kind of hard for her to make friends, since they say her eyes are "too bright"because they are lime green. She wasn't really close to anyone at the time, well except for her sister of course. As Sakura gets bullied constantly, Reibu always seem to arrive late to the scene, like almos every time. Whenever she tries to cheer her sister up, the younger girl wouldn't listen.  She sorta felt depressed about no one befriending her or knowing how to cheer her sister up. Upon one evening Reibu had spotted a boy named Lee, watching Sakura from the shadows as  her sister was hanging out with Ino. Once Reibu has approached the boy, she got all over protective and thought that Lee was one of the people that bullied Sakura. He tried to explain his actions to Reibu, but she wouldn't listen. Reibu thought if she kept an eye on Lee, for Sakura, she would be doing a favor, for her sister to warm up back into her arms again. But that kind of failed at some point, she accidential earned the boy's trust when she hadn't intended to, and she didn't know what to tell Sakura about this troublesome situation she got in. So she decided to keep quite about Lee. After hanging around him so often, she really didn't find him as a bad person. She also saw him work and train hard to get stronger, but she still has no idea why he watches Sakura from the shadows.

Upon an evening after Lee has finished his training with his mentor, Gai; she asks him why does he watches Sakura behind the scenes so often. The passionate boy confessed that he has fallen head over heels for Sakura, but doesn't know how to go up and tell her how he feels, and afraid of being rejected by her. Reibu now understands him, and this was not new to her but sort of shocking at the sametime. Reibu knew that her younger sister was beautiful, but most people would constantly pick on her. Because of her forehead, so Reibu thought people really had not intend to like her. After seeing Lee's misunderstanding, she would try to give him the courage so that one day that he can talk to Sakura. The passionate boy was greatful of his new friend that's trying to help him. He thought of returning the favorite by letting her training along his side and Gai's. Reibu wanted to refused the offer, but since Lee's was her first friend who excepted her, she thought it be rude if she hadn't taken it. Reibu just forced herself to except his offer. During the training of the three, she was really slacking, couldn't keep up with the other two. She was thinking about dropping out on the sessions since they are way out of her league. Lee had couraged her and brought her up back on her knees, even if she couldn't keep up with their extreme training. She soon found out that her strong point was using her right leg; but she still couldn't keep up with the two though, she was greatful where she found her strength.

After a while, seeing Sakura well to her normal self again, Reibu was glad and thought Ino was the perfect friend for her sister. One day, she asked about Ino, but Sakura, all she could say was rude things about the blonde Yamanaka.The older sibling was curios why she had hated the person who stood up for her. Sakura confessed that her and Ino were no longer friends was because they both have a crush on the same boy, Sasuke Uchiha. Reibu was so disappointed in Sakura for breaking up with the pale blonde for some boy. In fact every girl in the class has laid there eyes on the raven boy, well execpt for Hinata and Reibu, herself. Reibu couldn't resist but wanted nothing to see her own beautiful sister happy. So Reibu made a plan to befriend the raven, and get him to actually know Sakura, so they get to know eachother and be happy for eachother.

Well, an attemped to be on good terms with the raven hadn't gone according to plan, no matter what she did to make him speak, he just keeped him silent and gave her a look that read "why are you even here?". It sort of made matters worse that Sakura had spotted them together often to assume that Reibu was trying to get Sasuke herself. This caused the younger girl to be ferious and fustrated at her, not even speaking to her own sister. Reibu had cursed herself why she couldn't do anything right when it comes to her beloved sister, but she did not give up on her plan though.

After from being with the young Uchiha boy, left and right, she somehow managed to run into his older brother. She immediately fell in love with the older Uchiha, her first crush. She was being kind and friendly to her whenever she came cross and meet him, thinking she was a friend of Sasuke's; but the two don't really see eachother very often. Soon he comes to see her like a little sweet and kind sister. Once he asked her to look after Sasuke. Reibu had no idea what that meant, but she agreed to it.

Soon, it's been a while since she had seen Itachi and hadn't seen him anywhere at all. When she comes to ask Sasuke, he would just give her a menacing glare that would scare her half to death.


Part I: Reibu graduated from the Academy like most of the students. She was excited and was ready for what awaits her. She had gotten assigned to an all girl squad, and her sensei of the team is Anko. The girls would have trouble, getting along with there Sensei, and sometimes she crept the girls out. When it came to training with Anko, She went all out on them, making it seem as everything was just easy as pie. Even though Anko was tough and strict, she wasn't going to give in, because one of her main goals was to get stronger.

During the chunin exams, they have bearly made it through and Reibu had almost died if it wasn't for her comrades. She once again cursed herself for not being strong enough to survive without the help of others. During the preliminary part of the exam, she went up against Ryo Uchiha, but she had lost, do to not enough self-confidence.

But even though after the exams, she continues to look after Sasuke, and thinking of how Itachi and hopes to see him again.

After she visited Lee, wishing him luck, and for him to get his strength and health back. And training with Gai, she spotted Sasuke out late at night, seemig like he was going to leave the village. She caught up with him, not questioning his motives, she told him that she is willing to be the raven's shield. The Uchiha had not spoke a word, and allowed her to do whatever she wished.

Along the way to getting Sasuke's to Oro's hide out, Reibu was stopped by one of her teammates. Reibu has appologized for her actions, but nothing could stop her from continuing the way what she was doing. Reibu didn't want to fight one of the people she called her friend, but Reibu has fought against her own comrade, but to a suprise, Reibu had won, but then she realized that her comrade had gone easy on her. So her hurried ahead to catch up with the Uchiha.

Once the two ninja had gotten to Oro's hideout, he immediatly thought Reibu was wanting to serve under him. The pink haired girl stood her ground, showing no interest for working with him, and stated what her true intentions were. But the pale man and underling bribed her that she would become stronger if, they tested her out, and worked for them as well. She somehow managed to by the deal though. So the snake man gave her a cursemark, and they trained her using the snake style. She managed to master it but, not a very good wielding the justu style though.(she had never intended on using the cursemark).

Part II/ Shippuden: She trains hard alot, trying to improve her skills, she has gotten a few new moves; but she still questions her own strength. Most of the time, she just sits in the room and waits until orders are needed.

As she heard an explosion coming from the room that Sasuke was in, she was curious about what had disturbed his slumber. As she arrived to the chamber to see what was going on, she was abit suprised to see Naruto, Sakura, and some new faces that she did not know. She knew they were coming to bring her and Sasuke back, and the raven wouldn't hand them over easily. So she helped on Sasuke's defece in the battle.

Once Sasuke had killed Orochimaru, he went to get Reibu from her dark chamber and explained to her the deaath of the snake Sannin. The pink haired girl was abit confused about the Uchiha throwing his mentor to the grave when he had nothing else to learn from Orochimaru. But then she decided not to ask him since, she knew he wouldn't really care anyway. So she followed him along to retrieve Suigetsu, Karin and Jugo.

Once Sasuke told them to seperate and split up to find their target, Itachi Uchiha. Reibu was suprised, because she had never jheard him spoke a word of the older sibling since his disappearance. She was know worried for both of the siblings, wondering why Sasuke would kill his own flesh and blood, when Itachi's been a kind and loving brother to Sasuke, even though he's been missing for years. She decided once she finds the older Uchiha, she hopes that he could answer all of the questions that was spining in her head. As she headed towards to find him, she ran into Ryo Uchiha again, Reibu has never thought she would see him again. He had questions for the pink haired girl, alot though, but she didn't kknow that these questions was requested from her sister,Sakura Haruno. But Reibu just didn't tell him anything, thinking that Ryo wanted to be lead to Sasuke, something she would never do. They fought another battle once again, Reibu was about to lose once more, exactly like in the preliminaries, but what caught them off gaurd was a huge explsion when Deidara blew himself up. Reibu didn't waist anytime and toke the advantage to escape while the Uchiha has his gaurd drop.


After her escape, the went and followed what the explosion came from; once she got to her destination, she found herself reunited with team Hebi, and found out the explosion came from the battle that Sasuke was in. She was almost scared to death that he had gotten killed if he got caught in it.

Once Sasuke was in his private death match with his brother ; reibu just couldn't help but worry for them both, wishing that whatever happened between them, not wanting them to end up like this. She was sad and upset hearing that Itachi had died from the battle, she wished that there was a way for neither of them to die, but she had to except fate how it exactly is, which she hated. She once again heard Madara explain about the battle and how he brought the small raven to "his" side. Reibu suddenly kinda felt like this as dishavu, but she was deeply worried about Sasuke's new plan and knew she could do nothing to stop him from it.

After team Taka helping their leader reach Danzou, she tried to help as she always does, but Sasuke told her to stand back because Danzou was his kill alone, and needed no help what so ever at this point. She just simply listened to him, not wishing interfer with the Uchiha's battle, understanding that they were not only out of her league, but she might be killed as well.

After Sasukw defeated Danzou, and stabbing Karin. He was going to throw her away with no longer needed in her service, like he had done with Orochimaru. She understood now why he had killed his mentor back then. Sasuke just sees them as pawns and peices for him to use, but throws them away when he no longer sees interest in them. When Sasuke was stopped by his actions by a certain voice, Sakura. Reibu was suprised to see her sister to arrive on her own like this, thinking that she's followed a fool's path to do such a thing. When Sasuke ordered the young Haruno to kll the wounded Uzumaki girl, Reibu just knew that Sakura could not bring herself to it. But then the lime eyed girl has been struck by shock that the raven had nearly killed her. Even though she has served as the Uchiha's sheild for along time, she couldn't stand to imagine her own sister to be killed by his hand. So she pushe Sakura out of the way, allowing herself to be killed, sacrificing herself for her own beloved sister.

As she dies the last words that she hears from her subconciousness was "You don't find out what type a person you truly are till the end."

the mention of Ryo Uchiha (c)

story plot for Reibu Haruno (c) me

Naruto characters (c) Masashi Kishimoto
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Comments: 41

ShyLeviathan [2013-11-20 02:04:37 +0000 UTC]

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Oh, I feel bad for not critiquing this OC of yours sooner, dear. I'm sorry about that!! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/a/a… " width="19" height="19" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="417" title="Sweating a little..."/>

I must say this is a very interesting OC indeed! She was very thoroughly thought out. I know that it's very hard to make an oc that's the sibling of an already existing character, but you did alright. And I like the originality of your OC's looks. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>
I congratulate you on that. However there were some questionable points that I'd like for you to think about.

Her Background: I find it a little odd that people would make fun of her for her eyes. How can one's eyes be too bright? I'd rather they have made fun of her for having Heterochromia, or two different colored eyes. All of this seems like you just wanted a reason for her to be made fun of and not have friends, like Sakura. Let's try to stay away from that sort of path, okay? Try your very best to refrain from a sad past, and work hard to make sure that your oc isn't too much like their sibling.

Part I: The only concern I have here is that Sasuke allowed for her to follow him. I feel as though he would say something along the lines of "I don't need a babysitter". The whole point of Sasuke leaving the village was to get stronger; ergo he wouldn't want someone to tag along.
And what about when Naruto went to go get Sasuke back? Do you remember that battle? Where would she have been then? I doubt she'd have survived against Naruto when he was in that state. Even Sasuke barely made it out.

Your OC seems to have an issue with doing what I like to call "bending the canon". Meaning that she changes what really happened in the story to make herself fit into it. This is not a wise decision. To have an OC that everyone will respect, you need to make sure that you've left the anime nearly intact. The point of an OC is to add something that you felt the series was missing. You don't really change much. That's not considered original. Please keep this in mind.

Part II: Wait, you mean that this entire time she had no idea that Itachi murdered his own clan? She should have known well out of the Academy, because everyone else seemed to know by then. Even Sakura knew about it; she mentioned it in Shippuden. Word about an entire clan killing in Konoha will spread really fast. The demolition of a majority of a considerably powerful race is big news. She'd have to have been clueless to not notice it. And besides, Sasuke was constantly going on about revenge this, revenge that, Itachi, Itachi, Itachi. Since she is always near him, as his "shield", shouldn't she have heard him talking about it at least once? He gets pretty obnoxious about it during some battles...

Her Death: An interesting and sad end for her. I actually liked the way the whole thing worked itself out. I find her end quote to be a little cheesy, but that wasn't too bad. It was touching.

I'd rate this OC a 5 or 6 out of 10. You didn't do a bad job, dear, just a few things I would work on.

I apologize if any of this content has offended you in any way. Please remember that you do not have to change anything about your oc. This is all just my opinion. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>

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brokenHealer In reply to ShyLeviathan [2013-11-22 00:16:33 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for the critique, as I read it, my heart was pounded and filled with joy. And I am also happy to answer some of your questions

1. They made fun of her eyes because in the perspective of little kids. They don't see people eyes bright as neon and/or lime so they messed with her. Kind of like Kushina with her red hair when she joined the academy(if Im making any since)
This is in her younger days at the Academy.

2. She did not interrupt the battle with Naruto and Sasuke, she was stopped by a comrade from her team, which made her slow down her own tracks from catching up with Sasuke.

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TaNa-Jo [2013-10-23 21:32:32 +0000 UTC]

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Critque by =TaNa-Jo 23.10.2013
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Well,well, well this ..I must admit is very well done! I really love how you drew your Oc! The lineart is clean and the coloring matches very well with the Naruto - stile! I think hard - shading isn't easy so you did an excellent job with this! The colors are not too bright - perfect choice, really! All in all you direclty see it is Naruto Fan-Art e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="366" title=" (Big Grin)"/>

The background of your character is very detailled and it was very interesting to read. This is a prove how creative you are - not everyone can create such a long, detailled, structured and logical text. Of course I know Naruto so I could follow the story without any problems. I think it is really logical - although Sakura has no sister you created a "story" that makes a sister possible! I really like the ending part and the part with Lee - it was funny - Sensei Guy ;D

To the drawing again :

Maybe the knee is a bit too low? I mean the shinbone is too short... it looks too short in my opinion.

All in all AWESOME! AMAZING!
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Keep up good work e.deviantart.net/emoticons/t/t… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="262" title="Thumbs Up"/>e.deviantart.net/emoticons/c/c… " width="20" height="20" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="60" title="Clap"/>
=TaNa-Jo

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ShyLeviathan In reply to TaNa-Jo [2013-11-21 23:50:33 +0000 UTC]

Just thought I'd let you know that didn't draw this, did as a commission.  

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TaNa-Jo In reply to ShyLeviathan [2013-11-23 10:57:45 +0000 UTC]

Well nobody told me *_*

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ShyLeviathan In reply to TaNa-Jo [2013-11-25 01:53:04 +0000 UTC]

It was in the description...  

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TaNa-Jo In reply to ShyLeviathan [2013-11-25 16:50:48 +0000 UTC]

hmm... she told me per note to do it so I didnt read it

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Renniesane [2014-07-19 20:25:13 +0000 UTC]

This is so cute! How'd you make the outline for it in white?

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brokenHealer In reply to Renniesane [2014-07-19 22:07:36 +0000 UTC]

I didn't outline it. It came like that with the commission.

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ShadowHachia [2014-03-08 01:19:05 +0000 UTC]

Oh wow D: Reibu has such a sad life. ; 3 ;
But it's sweet how she saved Sakura in the end!

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brokenHealer In reply to ShadowHachia [2014-03-08 01:27:16 +0000 UTC]

her life has it's positives and it's negatives
it took me a while to fix this backgroung completely
before I got a DA and I was like into like 90 episodes of Naruto

since I was in middle school she was like the biggest mary-sue I had, I had to rewrite it several times to get it right
maybe i should make a development timeline for her so people knows how much she developed, unless you want to be the first one to here of course

I love the way i made her know and to be honest, I had no intention to make her look like Sakura xD but my friends find her cute that way
Reibu loves her sister to death, she would even put her life on the line to save her

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ShadowHachia In reply to brokenHealer [2014-03-08 01:29:32 +0000 UTC]

She does look really cute the way she is. XD
I tried doing the same with Kiku but I honestly can't see him with pink hair. xD

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brokenHealer In reply to ShadowHachia [2014-03-08 01:34:53 +0000 UTC]

have you tried a dark shad of pink, or magenta, those look cool on Anime guys(well ecexpt for Suichi, Natsu and Shima...they look cool with bright pink hair)

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ShadowHachia In reply to brokenHealer [2014-03-08 01:36:07 +0000 UTC]

I did but it looked weird to me.

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brokenHealer In reply to ShadowHachia [2014-03-08 01:37:13 +0000 UTC]

I guess some hair colors aren't fit for certain guys then xD

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Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-16 11:02:34 +0000 UTC]

Which outfit did you want me to draw her.
Younger or Older??

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brokenHealer In reply to Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-16 11:52:59 +0000 UTC]

Older :3

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Sparky-the-Scraggy In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-16 12:44:46 +0000 UTC]

Making sure you like the drawing before I ink it in and suuuuch~!!
sta.sh/0xzko9v3tg3

How is it so far?? I'll make the hair more even right now, because that's bothering me....
Other than that, do I need to change her expression or anything??

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brokenHealer In reply to Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-16 17:52:52 +0000 UTC]

Nope, It looks looks good

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Sparky-the-Scraggy In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-16 20:45:46 +0000 UTC]

Great~!! I'll start inking and colouring now~!!

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brokenHealer In reply to Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-16 21:06:58 +0000 UTC]

 ok :3

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Sparky-the-Scraggy In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-16 22:37:49 +0000 UTC]

I just finished inking it, now I'm colouring it~!!
C:
My colouring might not be 100%, I'm not that good at shading, so yeh....
>_>;;

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Sparky-the-Scraggy In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-16 12:10:04 +0000 UTC]

Alrighty~!!
I'll get to drawing the details!!
^ u ^;;

In a moment, my arms aren't feeling right.... They're tinngleeeh!!

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Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-13 18:34:32 +0000 UTC]

"After Sasukw defeated Danzou, and stabbing Karin. He was going to throw her away with no longer needed in her service, like he had done with Orochimaru. She understood now why he had killed his mentor back then."

You put Sasukw instead of Sasuke.....


Note - I didn't read it, I kinda just scrolled down and noticed that....

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brokenHealer In reply to Sparky-the-Scraggy [2013-10-13 23:00:14 +0000 UTC]

I kind of type fast sometimes

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Sparky-the-Scraggy In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-14 04:25:53 +0000 UTC]

Yeah

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BriskGoddess [2013-10-13 03:04:13 +0000 UTC]

She looks great and beautiful, and her story is lovely

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brokenHealer In reply to BriskGoddess [2013-10-13 04:10:24 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 05:46:42 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad to see that Ryo was mentioned XD
a little

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 05:49:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I added him apart of my headcanon :3

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 05:52:59 +0000 UTC]

Thanks C:
He likes making new comrades

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 05:55:57 +0000 UTC]

X3, I'm glad that I was able to make him happy

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 06:15:59 +0000 UTC]

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 06:18:01 +0000 UTC]

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 06:33:05 +0000 UTC]

Maybe we can have them team up sometime

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 06:37:04 +0000 UTC]

Definitely

(Reibu)I like that idea

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 06:41:11 +0000 UTC]

Ryo: Great!

Sounds good

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 06:47:36 +0000 UTC]

Well, what do you think of her backstory, if it's not to much trouble to ask

(Reibu)looking forward to work with you someday Ryo

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 06:50:00 +0000 UTC]

I like it
It's really long xD

Ryo: Same here Reibu-chan

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brokenHealer In reply to NARUFRO93 [2013-10-12 06:54:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks
Yeah, I kind of go into a detailed summary at times XD

(Reibu)*puts her hand out in from of Ryo**grins*

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NARUFRO93 In reply to brokenHealer [2013-10-12 15:20:09 +0000 UTC]



Ryo: *puts out his hand and shakes her hand* *grins back*

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