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Callyzah — DBZ - 03 - ENG
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I was actually kind of hoping I could use his clothing in a fan fic I'm writing. I don't draw, so it's not going to be drawn out, but I was still hoping I could use the design.
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Yay! Thank you. It really is a good design, how did you even think of it?
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I think I watch too many movies and I watch the clothes! 
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Vegeta's thoughts at the beginning are a bit odd. Not grammatically, but him calling it a 'strange ki' and then saying it's 'very weird' is slightly redundant, as in saying the same thing twice. Personally, I'd take out the 'very weird' part and just jump to 'and it's approaching fast', but like I said, it's not a grammar issue.
In Chichi's line: "I hope Goku comes quickly!" as 'comes' is used for singular pronouns. You say "he comes" or "she comes", and 'come' is for plural, as in "they come."
Otherwise... hey, Vegeta, no need to cause a break wind on your exit. Calm down @_@
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yaaay!!! Thanx!!! 
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oh, what? D: stupid aliens ruining everyone's fun time
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looooooooool always huh?!
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