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Description Every woman is nervous on the day of her wedding. This had sounded like a cliché when my mother had told me this, but now on the threshold of the same event my body was displaying all the signs of a blushing bride. Perversely, my mind was utterly calm. It had better things to worry about. Like the discovery I had been working on for the last five years.

The scheduled unveiling should have taken place a while ago. But my parents dropped this bomb on me. Marry His Highness, Alexander Petraeus Marcus Maxmillian the VIIIth, Prince and heir of the Andromeda Galaxy, and the last family to retain ties to Earth. In my opinion their claim to be the last family with pure Earthen blood was their only claim to fame. Of course, my opinion didn't matter. The people worshipped the royal family. And they controlled the biggest political, economic and social faction in the universe.

My family was one of the last few traditional families left. We had lost all our wealth but our status still meant enough for my father's word to mean something. It was inevitable for Zara, the brilliant, biological cosmologist daughter of the oldest family of the Whirpool Galaxy to be betrothed to the prince of the Andromedan Royal Family.

I, Zara, did not have a choice in the matter. The people decided for me. Any decision made otherwise and we would have been overthrown. I have never been one to rebel anyway. With my marriage would come status and wealth to add to my own. Love was one thing I did not expect from the union though. During our last meeting Prince Alex had made it clear that he would do his bit for an heir but would be going his own way after that. I could spend all the money I wanted, go wherever I wished, and I could take lovers discreetly. I demurely agreed. He had been known to be violent on occasion, and I wasn't going to test the theory for myself.

Besides, as long as I got everything I wanted, how did it matter if he went to another woman's arms to satiate himself?

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A week after the wedding and I was in funeral finery instead of one of the extravagant pieces in my wardrobe. He'd keeled over unusually fast. I'd put the powder in his dinner on our wedding night. He should have taken at least a week longer. Maybe some of that lard outlining his body had reacted with it and speeded up things a little. Not that it mattered really. I wonder why they don't expect a Physical Cosmologist to know anything about biology?

I pulled on my silk black gloves and put on a suitably distressed expression. My husband of a week had already left for the world beyond. Poor, poor princess. At least the people wouldn't be mourning for long. I just had to give some of the obvious signs during the funeral - nausea, dizziness – and maybe even faint at the end of it all.  I patted my tummy fondly. Noone would have any cause for complaint.

I would have to give up on revealing my discovery to the world though. If they saw this compound, they'd know what I'd done. Good thing the release had been rescheduled. I'd just show them one of the many things I've discovered over the years. It pays to keep your cards to yourself.
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Comments: 87

Calyptra In reply to ??? [2012-09-04 19:11:33 +0000 UTC]

Omg thank you for noticing! I'll change that and thank you really, it means a lot when people like old pieces. Makes you think maybe you aren't as bad as you make yourself out to be

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katarthis [2012-01-27 18:03:53 +0000 UTC]

Blink. That was fast. lol.

Congratulations on the DD - short and sweet wins the prize.

k

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Angie-Pictures [2011-10-31 15:58:20 +0000 UTC]

Congratulations on the DD!

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Calyptra In reply to Angie-Pictures [2011-10-31 16:53:15 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!

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Angie-Pictures In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-31 16:56:02 +0000 UTC]

My pleasure!

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Arichy [2011-10-31 11:29:05 +0000 UTC]

Hello! We're waiting your work here

Thank you

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Calyptra In reply to Arichy [2011-10-31 15:58:02 +0000 UTC]

I just approved the request

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Redd-Violet [2011-10-25 01:31:11 +0000 UTC]

oh ho HO. Was NOT expecting the ending. You stun me

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Calyptra In reply to Redd-Violet [2011-10-27 16:05:04 +0000 UTC]

Lol, thank you!

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Redd-Violet In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-27 22:48:25 +0000 UTC]

^^

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Happytown124 [2011-10-23 10:09:59 +0000 UTC]

ONE OF MY FAVORITY STORIES!

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Calyptra In reply to Happytown124 [2011-10-27 16:04:57 +0000 UTC]

ZANK YOU!

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Aeltari [2011-10-23 06:53:52 +0000 UTC]

A bit more about what the "discovery" is would be helpful, was it related to the child or was Zara just faking that? Is it cloning, a genesis project...

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Calyptra In reply to Aeltari [2011-10-27 16:04:51 +0000 UTC]

Didn't have the space as far as the word limit was concerned, but I might expand on that now Thank you!

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Umbreon-art [2011-10-23 02:32:23 +0000 UTC]

So good! And I usually don't read the stories on DA!

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Calyptra In reply to Umbreon-art [2011-10-27 16:04:25 +0000 UTC]

Why thank you!

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RedLily26 [2011-10-23 02:31:27 +0000 UTC]

This girl is my kind of princess

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Calyptra In reply to RedLily26 [2011-10-27 16:04:17 +0000 UTC]

Oh boy xD

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MeltingCORE [2011-10-23 02:22:29 +0000 UTC]

(heh, she hasn't been on for two days. i bet she'll be surprised when she sees all these comments. ) I think this is a interesting and well written piece. Like others have said, it feels like the start of a story. It leaves one yearning for more. Which is a good thing. (oh and just so you know, in the second to last paragraph you wrote "Noone" instead of "No one".)

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Calyptra In reply to MeltingCORE [2011-10-27 16:04:10 +0000 UTC]

GOD YES! Someone finally understands XD and thank you for pointing that out, I'll correct it

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MeltingCORE In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-27 19:45:16 +0000 UTC]

Yay, glad I do!

Your welcome.

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Kath-Leena [2011-10-23 02:04:15 +0000 UTC]

this is really good!!!!!!

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Calyptra In reply to Kath-Leena [2011-10-27 16:03:30 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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AbbeyCherylHopkins [2011-10-23 01:08:06 +0000 UTC]

I really like this

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Calyptra In reply to AbbeyCherylHopkins [2011-10-27 15:50:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks ^^

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maidenofwar [2011-10-23 00:40:07 +0000 UTC]

great, great work

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Calyptra In reply to maidenofwar [2011-10-27 15:50:18 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Leaving-My-Mark [2011-10-23 00:19:20 +0000 UTC]

Interesting piece. I wish it'd been a little longer, although I'm not saying it felt incomplete in a negative sense. But you could totally add more to this. A lot more.
But I love how we get such a great feel of the main character, and learn a bit about the kind of guy she married and the kind of people that live in the kingdom, nation, galaxy, or whatever it is she's princess of now.
Overall, it's rather clever and devious. I like how you don't spend a hundred paragraphs delving into how Earth was destroyed, what the galaxy and everything is like...you just leave it to the reader to imagine and focus on the meat of the story.

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Calyptra In reply to Leaving-My-Mark [2011-10-27 15:47:27 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! One is sort of forced to stick to the point with a word limit like that

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Leaving-My-Mark In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-28 01:27:37 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, very good point. Well, you did a great job with that word restraint! NaNoWriMo is coming up, and you could totally do something more with this for that.

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Calyptra In reply to Leaving-My-Mark [2011-10-28 16:18:23 +0000 UTC]

I have exams end of November. And whatever potential I have just doesn't last the whole, intense month! When I want to write a novel, I'll write it at my own speed But what all do you think I could do with this?

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Leaving-My-Mark In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-28 20:16:05 +0000 UTC]

Ah, I understand completely. I like writing at my own pace, too, but often times I also need a push to get me going. I think you could perhaps go into whether this character takes over the nation, country, whatever it is her husband rules, and show the people's reactions to her, her actions, the baby she'll have, etc. You could delve into the before: how she ended up disliking him and explaining more in depth how she planned things out and how she felt about being forced to marry. I can imagine a whole tale about her reign: the time leading up to it and the time to maybe when she's executed or overthrown (if they even do that in the world you've created) and why. It might be interesting to have a rather wicked character with whom the reader only has partial sympathy for. It would be cool to go into how she goes from poor girl being forced to marry to a manipulative dictator that the reader has mixed feelings about at the end of the book.

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Calyptra In reply to Leaving-My-Mark [2011-10-29 20:45:10 +0000 UTC]

Something like Vanity Fair, by W.M. Thackeray? I might give that a shot. I have a very different perspective on her though. A very 'shades-of-grey' one. Lemme see if I can churn that out!

And thank you!

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Leaving-My-Mark In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-29 21:12:17 +0000 UTC]

Cool, good luck with that! You're very welcome! If you post any sort of extension of this or something like that, let me know, I'd be interested in reading it!

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Calyptra In reply to Leaving-My-Mark [2011-10-30 14:20:45 +0000 UTC]

Will do! Don't expect it anytime in the very near future though xD

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Leaving-My-Mark In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-30 14:25:47 +0000 UTC]

Ha ha, okay.

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RandomActofMuse2 [2011-10-22 23:25:53 +0000 UTC]

Intriguing. I'd love to see this turned into a full-length novel. Just a couple notes, though

Instead of "and speeded up things a little" try "and sped things up a little." It flows better.

Also, unless she's faking that pregnancy, a week is far too soon for a woman to know she's pregnant, even if she managed to get knocked up on her wedding night. Takes two weeks, on average, before the nausea and dizziness show up.

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Calyptra In reply to RandomActofMuse2 [2011-10-27 15:46:53 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the suggestions! Will probably take you up on the first, and as for the second - I really didn't know better, so thanks! I will keep this mind and see how it can be corrected

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RandomActofMuse2 In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-27 18:43:02 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome. Thanks for sharing it - it's really good

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Calyptra In reply to RandomActofMuse2 [2011-10-27 19:39:31 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! It was such a surprise coming back to this. Support like this is what makes me want to pick it up again

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LadyTara [2011-10-22 19:56:49 +0000 UTC]

I wish this was longer, it's like only the beginning to a story that I'd love to read the rest of. Very nice work either way, amusing, well-written and likeable.

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Calyptra In reply to LadyTara [2011-10-27 15:45:55 +0000 UTC]

If I ever get enough time, energy and inspiration, I might work on it. Thank you! ^^

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therandomfactor [2011-10-22 18:32:47 +0000 UTC]

I like it. It's clever and a little bit wicked, smart and unexpected. One thing, though: You list her as a "biological cosmologist", then later claim that no one expects a "Physical Cosmologist" to know anything about biology.

Altogether, the piece is very good. Sort of scifi kidnaps fantasy and takes it out for a quick reality check.

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Calyptra In reply to therandomfactor [2011-10-27 15:45:32 +0000 UTC]

Oh good catch! I shall mend that asap! Thank you!

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Argentum-Silvia [2011-10-22 15:37:16 +0000 UTC]

Great story! I really like it.

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Calyptra In reply to Argentum-Silvia [2011-10-27 15:45:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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Argentum-Silvia In reply to Calyptra [2011-11-03 21:42:23 +0000 UTC]

:3 Welcome.

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primordialsea [2011-10-22 13:58:53 +0000 UTC]

Interesting piece!
I take it she is patting her tummy fondly and being nauseous because she's pregnant and that there would be complaint if there wasn't an heir. Is that it, or have I missed something?

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Calyptra In reply to primordialsea [2011-10-27 15:44:57 +0000 UTC]

Yes! (I had to reread the piece again to reconfirm because it's so old! xD) and thank you!

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primordialsea In reply to Calyptra [2011-10-27 16:29:38 +0000 UTC]

Good stuff - It took some work with my imagination!

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