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Candikitten — Hips don't lie prt1
Published: 2012-08-04 23:17:56 +0000 UTC; Views: 6464; Favourites: 160; Downloads: 51
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I know you guys have waited ages for this.. sorry to disappoint you but now I know its official that my comics suck in comparison to Jacks. xD my storyline hardly even makes sense...What is supposed to be happing in part one is Toni and a few known mates are going shopping. Toni stops to look into a shop window then Kisha bumps into Toni and then say she has a fatass to which everyone is shocked and in suspense for part two... unfotunatly I diddnt execute that very well so.. hope you can still enjoy the pictures at least ... even if it is messy and poorly coloured in v,v
I promise to make a better effort on part 2
Love you guys <3
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Honestly the comic is pretty nice. ^^ I tend to avoid the bigger stories anyway. The sometimes get me choked up. >< besides, it's more fun to see stuff on nicky or minx anyway. :3
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I Don't Think It's Messy And It Doesn't Suck I Think It's Cute And I Wanna Punch Kisha In The Face For Saying That I'm Taking Up For Toni Because That's What Friend's Do ;3
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i dont think it sucks i love it if it is a comic i wish to be in it
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So is she saying she has a fat ass as a compliment? Because her ass is amazing!
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-whispers: p.s. i think kisha's tooootally jelly. just saying. XD great work!
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Kisha jelly cause her ass aint as juicy as Toni's. So now she wanna start a fight. Thats what I thought it was about
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Hunny, this is so awesome!!! 
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Nice, but better luck next time, keep trying XD!
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"I know you guys have waited ages for this.. sorry to disappoint you but now I know its official that my comics suck in comparison to Jacks. xD my storyline hardly even makes sense..."
It depends. Is this your first comic strip? If so, then it isnt any strange.
Jack didnt really upload any comic strips before he went on with his ongoing large scale comic.
I think the difference lies in the amount of time, planning and work he put on his pages(and plot, at least from what he have said), compared to your page above. The more the better i would say, unless it gets overkill like 100 hours a page.....
"What is supposed to be happing in part one is Toni and a few known mates are going shopping. Toni stops to look into a shop window then Kisha bumps into Toni and then say she has a fatass to which everyone is shocked and in suspense for part two... unfotunatly I diddnt execute that very well so.. hope you can still enjoy the pictures at least ... even if it is messy and poorly coloured in v,v"
Well....you can see that but it is not clear as the day.
The first obvious flaw is the lack of background.
Green-light blue and white is not much for it.
Otherwise it is very empty.
No streets, buildings, trees, windows, shops or whatsoever. You should have drawn something like that and your comic would have gotten more interesting to see and think as more thought through.
There is lacking of motion lines as well.
In square 4 when Kisha bumps into Toni, it is a bit plain.
Does she bump her with her own butt or wham Toni's bottom with her hand? You can see Kisha's hand raised so you start to wonder.
Either way, in that part it would be more interesting to also see some motion lines showing she got bumped so that her body shook a little and that the delinquent actually bumped her and should have motion lines around her left hand and/or left thigh and so on.
In the last square when Kisha shows her annoyance and clench her right fist, it could have been better to see some lines around it as if showing like a small vibration/shock wave through the air due to fast closing of her fist.
Or at least, some motion lines expressing that her fist got closed in a split second or less.
There is more to note.
Pretty obvious the coloring didnt take long to do.
It is rather rough and not very complex or deep. Still, it is better than plain line art in black and white.
But several times the black edges of the lines are rough and decrease the feeling of what you see.
Especially around the hips of toni in the first sqaure and the last one on Kisha's hips.
Otherwise it is pretty good.
Furthermore, in the last square, why didnt you color miss Panda but just the rest of the gang?
You must have missed it.
Not sure why you made the males in square 2 to not wear anything over their chest.
I nearly expected them to wear a tanktop or vest.
Maybe you wanted them to be a bit daring or some service for the ladies and alike?
It seems as if you have increased the size of Toni's thighs, hips and bottom.
Easy to see that in the front page and square 2 when she lean in and look into the shop window.
I dont mind it. But you should make sure to not let get it out of your control.
(I have seen artists that started with the same track and later reached strange ideas about character design, proportions and so on and never returned to a somewhat "sane" or decent level again.)
Although it looks imbalanced when her chest is quite small in comparison.
Her breasts could be bigger, but it may be your preference to draw her like that.
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Thank you for your very detailed response. ^w^ it is much appriciated.
The bad colouring is dew to my drawing tablet not working... I'm not quite sure why buy it just wont colouring probably like it use to... maybe its on a wrong setting or something but when i do one clean swoop of my pen.. first there is a delay where nothing shows up... and then shortly after a jagged line of colour appears.
Working with equipment like that has left me frustrated as I'm use to it working perfectly fine. i would just colour in big blocks and then remove the unwanted areas with the eraser , but because the problem is in the drawing tablet it self it also errases jaggerdy.
Since I had already promised I'd upload the picture I knew I couldn't keep working so slow when I was clearly achieving very little and so I uploaded it.
It may not seem like it but I took as much time on this comic as jack dose with his. Yes it is my first so I guess its to be expected... but I also noticed that unlike jack I'm use to just drawing single posing pictures like the one on the left.. and so my comics have a lack of movement which means its harder to tell how the story is being played out... I think I might just stick to normal posing pictures in the future.
On a normal day I'd naturally ask jack for help or ask to use his drawing tablet instead... but he's been out of the country all week visiting family. Every time he calls he asks me when I'm going to upload my comic strip and sounds soo excited... which kind of added to the pressure of me wanting to upload it as soon as possible.
v,v I wanted him to be proud of me which is probably why I took it out on my sent when I eventually did upload it in this condition. He' hasent seen it yet but I feel dissapointed in myself.
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Thank you very much for telling the background to why the pic turned out like it did.
It gives more depth to things.
Especially between the artist, her art and the people who see the art.
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Lol it's cute though ^^. Don't be hard on yourself.
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sexynes obverload x3
i wanna see more of the comic
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I love this piece X3
Sexyness and cuteness combined into epicness X3
Great job!!8D
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happy birthay <3 and thank you
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And thanks for the b-day wish :3
You're too sweet
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woooooooow great art work
is like a copilation of Tony and the other girls :3
I love the big picture, is really cute
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I like it, but it could use polishing. Other than that it is really well drawn.
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if you want, I can try to do some bg work on it....
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