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madelly [2013-10-22 02:01:16 +0000 UTC]

Hi! This is a very lovely piece, very powerful and the atmosphere is established well. I would like to point out some minor things that more thought could have easily remedied. It's mostly some tidbits about composition. The first thing that struck me was the very clear focal point in the center of the image. And I then proceeded to look at the boy and the log, and lastly the water and clouds on the side. The thing about focal points is that we want to make sure to plan them really well, or else the viewer will question what they are seeing. Here, I saw the boy sitting with his legs outstretched in front of him holding a fishing pole straight in front of him, the log perfectly horizontal and parallel to the horizon line. The boy's center of balance looks a little compromised in that position, and wouldn't sitting on a log while fishing for possibly many hours hurt your, uh, you know? xD The log's positioning I think was quite ingenious though. The fact that it was parallel to the horizon line lent a sense of unity to the whole picture. Next is the water; the only thing I would say is that the reflected light on the water could do to be a little bit more randomly placed and they don't all have to be same size; they can be different sizes and lengths. I think the clouds and sky were marvelously done, and I hope to see more from you in the future. 

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