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Published: 2008-02-19 18:32:24 +0000 UTC; Views: 106; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 2
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Description Carnivorous creatures claw
At dead flesh and meat,
Ripping it from the bone;
Blood stained teeth
Tear and chew
As more scarlet fluid
Saturates fur and dirt;
The earth beneath
Padded paws
Turns to rusty mud
And reeks of iron
(Among other unpleasantries);
Darwinism is the law,
The strong conquer
The weak;
And those who fall behind,
Enrich the soil
With the blood
Dripping from their feet...
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Comments: 18

Infrunitas [2008-02-29 14:29:00 +0000 UTC]

Nicely done but I have one slight critique:

When you read the last two lines it comes off as the conquered are walking in blood. I don't know if you intended it that way:

With the blood
Dripping from their feet...

I would advise:

And those who fall behind,
Enrich the soil
With their blood
Dripping from the (victor's/conqueror's) feet...

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-02-29 17:59:16 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I actually meant it to be the victim's blood......perhaps I can try to reword it or something.....

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-14 15:18:15 +0000 UTC]

or might be my defective talents at viewing. I'll never be the typical poet when it comes to reading it (don't have a stomach for some of the fanciful things they think up.)

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-14 16:33:36 +0000 UTC]

Could be. Well, a lot of people read some of the stuff I come up with and look at me like there's something wrong with me. I'm actually a pretty bubbly person (at least that's what I'm told ) and I'm optimistic, so it suprises people when they hear/read some of my more depressing and dark poetry. I love to watch the looks on their faces!

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-14 17:09:50 +0000 UTC]

If they expect us to smile everyday, it's good to get some of those darker thoughts outta the way!

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-14 19:39:24 +0000 UTC]

I guess that's true... It's funny though....I'm kind of a twisted person...

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-14 21:50:20 +0000 UTC]

I think that's the beauty in all of us. That twisted fiber that likes to scramble the world a little.

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-15 19:03:09 +0000 UTC]

I don't think I ever thought of it that way! I've got such an odd sense of humor though.....see my mom has a French sense of humor and my dad has a very British sense of humor....I've got a little bit of both, plus something completely my own! So most people just look at me funny when I try to make a joke.....I do come up with some really good ones though!

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-17 12:00:54 +0000 UTC]

that's a fun combination!

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-17 19:15:21 +0000 UTC]

Isn't it though? Sometimes it suprises me how alike me and my mom are. You know the movie "Blades of Glory"? Well.....my mom LOVES it! I knew she would, but I also knew that my dad wouldn't!

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-17 21:35:39 +0000 UTC]

Never seen it. Any good?

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-17 23:44:38 +0000 UTC]

It is an AWESOME movie! Very funny!

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-18 01:06:26 +0000 UTC]

classic, never will forget funny?

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-18 04:19:16 +0000 UTC]

Hmm.....well.....I don't know if it's that funny, but it's pretty damn close!

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Infrunitas In reply to catnipkitty [2008-03-19 12:26:14 +0000 UTC]

You got me interested now. Grr, guess I'll have to go rent it.

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-03-19 22:31:04 +0000 UTC]

It's worth the money spent though!

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RockerByBaby [2008-02-20 06:08:27 +0000 UTC]

I like how this ended. Good imagery, love!



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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-02-20 15:21:23 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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