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Published: 2008-09-27 04:30:32 +0000 UTC; Views: 517; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 2
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"Such a man," theatricalpraises boast; but what
podium does he rest upon;
one I cannot reach?
Is this blind ovation
tribute to an incurable
greed? Well, sir, forgive
me, I don't praise
gloppy maladies my
delicate system can do without.
"What a character!" those
disillusioned hosts declare.
Beg pardon my senile elders,
but have cataracts crept
upon your eyes? Do you not
see the sick, immoral puddle
of tar in front of you?
No bubbles of laughter
emerge from my throat
to dance on my tongue;
instead, sharp bile stings
these living pipes.
"How brave," stern officers
gravely state. Brave indeed;
a true contortionist on his
best day, he is, when
faced with minimal danger:
a woman, perhaps?
So, my poor, pathetic companions,
continue to gawk in awe
at the putrid display before you,
if you wish. I'll (instead of
kneeling to worship) just
ascend this anthill before me
and show you the foul hypocrite
your majesty truly is
as I curl my fingers
'round balls of brass!
Comments: 22
RockerByBaby [2008-11-18 22:34:40 +0000 UTC]
The flow and organization of this was just down-right outstanding; marveloustatic!
And I admire your sarcastic tone and gentle touch of harsh humour.
It was just..truly fun to read, excellent smooth word choice and all!
I'm proud of your latest pieces. Your dedication and passion are shining through.
My only "irk" with your work would be the formatting. But there has to be something to work on, or all the fun, pride, fantasy, and truth of it all would not exist or diminish.
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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-11-19 05:03:03 +0000 UTC]
Well thank you very much my friend! I really appreciate it!
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lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-02 19:08:42 +0000 UTC]
Yes, its very discriptive. I was going to add more to my first post, but i guess i hit send before i did lol how are you?
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catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-03 00:05:19 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you liked it! LoL, I hate it when that happens!
I'm doing alright. I've got the Latin class from Hell, so I've been really busy with that lately. But I'm actually planning on dropping it for a less intense Latin class. The way I see it, it's better for me to get a good grade in a class with less credit hours than to fail a class with more credit hours. I really feel like a weight has been lifted off of my shoulders! How about you? Are you doing ok?
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lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-04 14:43:30 +0000 UTC]
Im doing good, although Ive been super busy and usually if I come on here Im mutlitasking doing something for University. Other than that my life consists of sleeping, eating and being sick with colds-Ah the life of a university student!
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catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-04 18:50:32 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad to hear things are ok with you! I know what you mean about being a college student though! Go to class, work, eat, sleep, and then proceed to do the same thing all over again the next day!
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lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-04 21:34:11 +0000 UTC]
i know! its rather annoying at times
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catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-05 04:01:08 +0000 UTC]
Yup! But then there are those times when you just hang out with friends and have some fun (because otherwise, you'd go insane)!
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catnipkitty In reply to kitsune2022 [2008-10-01 23:39:12 +0000 UTC]
Why thank ya ma'am! Chewy! Nice!
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b1gfan [2008-09-29 02:32:49 +0000 UTC]
many many good lines! too many to select! to whom does it refer?
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catnipkitty In reply to b1gfan [2008-09-29 15:42:01 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you! I actually just started writing it without thinking of who I had in mind...I'm not sure if it specifically refers to anyone really...
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b1gfan In reply to catnipkitty [2008-09-29 20:15:01 +0000 UTC]
well, it has a good feel to it
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Infrunitas [2008-09-28 01:50:26 +0000 UTC]
Beg pardon my senile elders
that line is priceless!
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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-09-28 06:24:48 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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