HOME | DD

catnipkitty โ€” Black-Out
Published: 2008-10-25 02:05:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 112; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 2
Redirect to original
Description Just kids who don't
know what their moves
allude to, as they
bump-grind-grind
around the dance floor,
pressed against sweaty
flesh (the aroma
reminiscent ofย old gym shorts
locked up in a dank room)
to the beat of some
vulgar verse while
sipping from overgrown
baby cups (the broken glass
meaning nothing but
a coming of age),
yet dribbling the
sticky liquids along
tile squares just like toddlers;
it's fun to play games and
break the rules, always afraid
of getting caught (not quite
like flies in a spider's web),
yet when the fun is over
the bad ending has yet to come,
sending liquid humans stumbling to the
nearest hole in the ground (silently
awaiting the toxic gift) to
bestow a day's worth of use;
slowly and painfully they slip
into sleep wrapped around
the bowl like a scarf;
come morning all the
fun is over as brains scramble
to remember where they are
and what really happened
the night before...
Related content
Comments: 14

Infrunitas [2008-11-22 13:51:31 +0000 UTC]

truly toyful on the whispering tongue

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-11-22 22:12:39 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 0

RockerByBaby [2008-11-18 03:29:32 +0000 UTC]

You're applying more metaphors to your poetry, good deal!
I loved how this ended, and your use of baby cups, broken glass, spider webs, etc.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-11-18 19:01:28 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

RockerByBaby In reply to catnipkitty [2008-11-18 21:56:00 +0000 UTC]

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 0

AshleyLeopard [2008-11-16 02:44:16 +0000 UTC]

This was amazing. I really wanted to suggest it as a Daily Deviation but us peons aren't allowed, only the staff for DA are allowed.

Anyways, this has fantastic imagery, something that I think you were trying to convey: Being an adult and partying (although partying as an adult should be done responsibly, always) mixed with the fear of staying as a child (Using the word "kids," baby cups, etc.) It shows that we're all not as adult as we think we are, not just with drinking but with a lot of things. Thoughtful and artistic!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to AshleyLeopard [2008-11-16 18:27:28 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! It would be awesome if we could suggest people for Daily Deviations. I'm really glad you liked it! And you've got the meaning dead on too!

How have you been? I haven't really heard from you in a while.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 0

lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-25 03:22:11 +0000 UTC]

Wow. I know exactly what you are talking about. And then they brag how many times they think they got laid...cause they never remember how many times it actually was.
Well written and descriptive.....but I really wouldnt know, cause thats not my world.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-25 03:33:52 +0000 UTC]

I'm glad to hear I'm not the only one! I'm currently living on a floor full of freshmen girls who think it's absolutely necessary to go out every weekend and get drunk.....personally, I don't feel the need to get drunk. There are too many things to worry about later. Thanks! I'm not really sure how it goes either; I just observe what happens to other people.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-29 18:13:28 +0000 UTC]

Observing people can be fun...I watched some guy in my Chemistry fall asleep!!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-29 20:03:20 +0000 UTC]

Definitely! It's fun to watch people fall asleep in class...they always try to stay awake, so they're head slowly droops and then they jerk back awake. It's happened to me though, so I know I've provided some entertainment for other people in class before.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-30 13:20:29 +0000 UTC]

lol I know its funny!! I always do it too, and then I end up snickering by myself cause I think its funny.

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

catnipkitty In reply to lost-lil-eskimo [2008-10-30 16:22:02 +0000 UTC]

And then everyone looks at you like you're crazy, right? I do that too!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 1

lost-lil-eskimo In reply to catnipkitty [2008-10-30 22:16:54 +0000 UTC]

LOL Yes!!

๐Ÿ‘: 0 โฉ: 0