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Published: 2008-08-06 00:57:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 81; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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All in vain, wescuttle through our lives of
misunderstanding and illusion,
just to make ends meet,
with hungry mouths not our own
that constantly whine in our ears
and bellies that never stop their
pitiful groans for more nourishment.
Fighting and violence
continue to contaminate pure minds,
spreading the disease
that is our own blood,
our own family of strangers
populating enormous expanses of land
across incomprehensible gaps.
Those black, gaping pits
that separate worlds and people
never fill; the pollution of hearts,
and minds, and souls just sink
deeper into the trenches of
old wars that have past, but were never finished.
The steaming stench of decay
is sickening, yet no one inhales its
noxious fumes - or cares to
for that matter.
All are blind to their flaws
yet are quick to pounce on
another's sins, as if to purge
the Earth of the scum slowly
oozing across its face.
Nothing but incoherent grunts and
snarls of inconvenience
between fat gorillas,
too stubborn to just get up and
move.
What happened to our race
that was supposed to be the best?
When did our minds atrophy in our skulls,
rotting while we live;
our hearts harden into clumps of
filthy dry ice, the caustic kisses
given a welcome feeling to lovers;
our souls become dim flickers
in a deserted mine shaft, mere rhinestones
that should have been diamonds
sparkling brilliantly in the dark?
How did the Earth die...
yet no one knew it?
Comments: 10
Infrunitas [2008-08-07 23:18:29 +0000 UTC]
great diction. I like how the second to last stanza settles in my mind.
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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-08-08 02:49:59 +0000 UTC]
Thanks a bunch! I'm glad you liked it!
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RockerByBaby [2008-08-06 01:11:32 +0000 UTC]
Third stanza on down are terrific. The stanza before the last two lines was magniftycent!
You've unique imagery in this!
Did you mean to say "end's meat" in the first stanza because of the line after about hungry mouths?
"ends" doesn't need an apostrophe, either.
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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-08-06 01:25:44 +0000 UTC]
Thanks!
I just figured it fit....I don't think I really put a whole lot of thought into that part...hmm...
And thanks for letting me know! I wasn't sure about that. I've heard it a lot and used the term, but never have seen it written down. I'll go fix it now, since I'm on!
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RockerByBaby In reply to catnipkitty [2008-08-06 01:34:22 +0000 UTC]
You're very welcome!
Oh yes, it fits!
hmm..
Anyime!
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