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Published: 2008-09-18 02:46:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 59; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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The warm glowof a fire's prism
stretches its flowing
fingertips across
my eyelids.
Slowly they slide open -
thin slits in my visage,
vision blurred by
a spectacular white:
solid and air
conformed to greet
passionate love,
as the glowing dawn
sprawls over our
intertwined limbs,
revealing the long night's dance
of rough friction
between the skin, intimate
caresses, and hoarse promises
whispered in the dark.
Will daylight end
our fiery embrace?
Let's make this
new day disappear
as swiftly as it came.
Close the blinds and
draw the curtains;
shut out the morning
and bring back the night;
stretch out your
smooth hands and
eclipse the sun for
one more dark ride,
clutched in each others arms...
Comments: 14
RockerByBaby [2008-09-19 04:59:19 +0000 UTC]
This was emotionally and physically moving, my wows!
I would agree you are getting better.
First stanza stood out to me as well.
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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-09-20 04:25:26 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
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Ran-ten [2008-09-19 00:12:26 +0000 UTC]
O_O wow. That was very vivid.
I didn't even have to read it fully to get teh picture.
Good use of words. Nice name.
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catnipkitty In reply to Ran-ten [2008-09-19 02:48:28 +0000 UTC]
Yeah....I've never actually written anything quite like that, so I surprised myself! Thanks!
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AshleyLeopard [2008-09-18 21:26:02 +0000 UTC]
Beautiful poem! Very sexy without being explicit, which is my favorite kind of sexy. It reminds me of a lot of characters (mine and others.) Gorgeous!
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catnipkitty In reply to AshleyLeopard [2008-09-19 02:51:28 +0000 UTC]
Why thank you ma'am! I think I'm starting to go into territory I've never ventured in before with my writing.
It's been fun so far!
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