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catnipkitty β Happy Halloween
Published: 2007-10-29 19:49:16 +0000 UTC; Views: 96; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 3
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Description
Spirits fly freeThrough empty streets
And howl a
Haunting song,
And all the
Monsters of
Childhood nightmares
Come out to sing along
The dead rise up
To run amuck
In the streets
Where children
Play,
With ragged strips
Of flesh
Hanging off their
Bones
Accompanied by
A foul stench
Of rotting sewage
On a hot summer's day
Fallen leaves dance
With the briskly blowing
Wind
And laugh with
Each other
As more fallen members
Join in
And all throughout
The hollow streets
Shrieks of joy commence
As ghouls must tell
All they see
Happy Halloween!
Comments: 19
I like this a lot! It balances the fun/silly side of Halloween with some scary imagery. 
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Thanks! 
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Can't wait to read it! XD
I was going to enter Pretty Caroline into the DA Halloween contest but it was too long, and then I didn't get it together to enter anything else!
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Aww, that sucks. It would've been great to enter!
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I didn't! Thanks for telling me!
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You're welcome!
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I'll let you know beforehand, how's that? :3
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Ok, that's fine!
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Lovely little addition. I agree with Rockerbybaby's assessment and really enjoy the fun that this piece inspires.
My only critique: (Iβve edited this line 3 times now and can't find the exact wording to properly convey my message. Grr). The third stanza sits a little 'funny' in my mind in how it resides within the rest of the piece. I read it twice without the third stanza and four with it. The brevity of the lines accompanied by the brisk ending makes it seem slightly out of place. With the mood of the other stanzas, the ending of third has a (though slightly clichΓ©
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Thanks!
Hmmm.....I think I know what you're saying. The third stanza is light and frilly compared to the rest of the poem....when I wrote it, I was trying to convey the excitement of Halloween through everything, including nature.....if that makes sense.....?
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Well that's good! I helped my friend write a scary story, so I'll be putting that up soon too!!
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lovely! I can't wait to read it.
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Shall be putting it up momentarily!
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I think this pretty much sums up the spirit of Halloween!
I imagined children singing this as they skip door to door for candy
I think this carried great imagery, too
Because I've lately been the grammar nazi, I spotted "nightmares" in the first stanza, and "ghouls" in the last. You probably find me annoying by now 
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Thank you, as always, for the nice comments!! 
I'll go fix them now!
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Right on!! I'm glad you're one of the few that recognize and comprehend that dilemma
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No problem!
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