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Published: 2008-02-06 15:19:14 +0000 UTC; Views: 71; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description I tried to find
The soul that cried
On this bleak and dreary night,
When angel tears
Poured from the skies
And dripped down my face

I tried to call out the name
Of that haunting moan,
That withering echo of pain;
But the foreboding wind
Swept all sound away,
All but the heartwrenching sobs
Penetrating thick clouds
And the maze-like, gray haze

I tried to follow
Such tortured wails
Ripped from an aching throat,
That shuddering sound
Only a mourning mother makes
For a child of marble,
Gone forever

I listen and search
For the grieving soul,
But realize too late
Who I am really searching for;
I feel the sorrow,
The pain, the hate;
My child has been taken too soon,
Swept up to heaven's gate;
My eyes are weary,
My throat is sore;
I am a mother,
No more...
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Comments: 7

Infrunitas [2008-02-29 14:30:20 +0000 UTC]

Definitely my favorite of your recent additions. I do believe I'll fancy another read-through.

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catnipkitty In reply to Infrunitas [2008-02-29 18:00:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a bunch!

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RockerByBaby [2008-02-11 04:47:14 +0000 UTC]

Both are wonderful, but something about the first version sways me towards preferring it.

And I'm pretty sure it's the extra touch of grief at the end, guess I could relate to it more

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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-02-11 16:18:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Well, that's ok. Whichever you like better it fine with me! I'm just glad you think both are good. I think I could actually relate more to the second one....don't know why though.... ...?

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RockerByBaby In reply to catnipkitty [2008-02-11 18:59:59 +0000 UTC]

hm....

Good deal!

Welcome!



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catnipkitty In reply to RockerByBaby [2008-02-11 23:49:38 +0000 UTC]

I don't understand it either.....maybe I just have more of a mother's instinct in me than normal...?

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RockerByBaby In reply to catnipkitty [2008-02-12 01:01:11 +0000 UTC]

hey, maybe!?

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