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ChelOpera — Breakdown
Published: 2010-12-11 17:38:44 +0000 UTC; Views: 435; Favourites: 17; Downloads: 1
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Description Its started on a Wednesday,
My breakdown-- my beginning.

Secret graces, silent faces, me racing towards my grave.

The screams of nights and horrid frights.

The people coming, my mother humming.

A stab of pain, no personal gain.

     It ended on a Wednesday:
        I ended on a Wednesday.
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Comments: 10

CarzyGoose [2010-12-20 03:24:21 +0000 UTC]

good work.

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ChelOpera In reply to CarzyGoose [2010-12-20 20:08:09 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!!

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signed-silence [2010-12-17 04:42:11 +0000 UTC]

Always Wednesdays. I like the repetitiveness in this. Good job.

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ChelOpera In reply to signed-silence [2010-12-17 20:40:35 +0000 UTC]

Bahahaha, thanks!

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signed-silence In reply to ChelOpera [2010-12-18 00:14:35 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

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ozone-777 [2010-12-14 00:38:33 +0000 UTC]

Loved it.


P.S would you mind checking out my gallery when you get the chance.

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ChelOpera In reply to ozone-777 [2010-12-14 12:23:31 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much!

and I wouldn't mind at all.

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ozone-777 In reply to ChelOpera [2010-12-14 13:53:12 +0000 UTC]

No Problem, and Thank You <3

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ChelOpera [2010-12-13 00:32:00 +0000 UTC]

Thanks a ton for the feedback!

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criminalsheep [2010-12-13 00:00:36 +0000 UTC]

The rhymes are quite simple, but nice. You aren't simply using a word because it rhymes - they actually do fit, so it's ok.

I think maybe it would flow better without the 'me' in the third line, but it's not a glaring error, so whatever.

I think the vagueness of it works in it's favour. Well done.

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