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Published: 2016-03-01 04:40:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 267; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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my two favorite co's in the history of creepypasta, the one on the left is my favorite called the preacher, she was Lord Zalgos' first proxy, she is immortal and her weapon choice is two knife's, she was born and raised in russia so she has a thick russian accent, she was killed by being pushed of a window from a 15 meter school building from a bully named Lucy, she kills sinners (thinks that are sinners) and before she kills them..she says these words "i'll give you a moment to prey". The one in the middle is named rose the slicer, she use to have chestnut hair, but now has white hair from being burned. she was the popular girl at her school and has millions of friends and a cute and loving boyfriend, but, her boyfriend tells her that he loves one of her friends instead of her..he breaks up with her. later on he tries to kill her when she was home alone, she loses her her and the side of her mouth was sliced with the knife he was holding. she finally got the strength to fight back, she grabs the succors from the table and slices his throat and stabs him 10 times. she survived and escaped the fire from her house, she is covered in burn marks and wears a necklace holding the succors that killed her boyfriend, she slices peoples eye and says these words before killing them "close your eyes and count to ten"now i dont won't to do all the details for the barker, ill make sure to do there true stories on Wattpad and link it to here, lets just say...the barker is kind of like jason the toymaker....not really
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lornii [2016-03-01 20:54:15 +0000 UTC]
I'm just going to come out and say it, to me personally your characters aren't very appealing here.
It's mostly to do with their personality, giving two traits isn't going to make viewers understand or literally know anything about your character.
A good way to start would be five positive traits and five negative traits, this way they're far more interesting and fleshed out.
In addition to this, TWO of the characters here are insane. That's fine, in theory. However, you don't expand upon them being insane and use it as a defining personality trait, insanity isn't just black and white like people make out, there are different forms of insanity, if you are going to use insanity please educate yourself before you offend someone. Again The Barker needs more to her than being "insane" if not, she's not a character, she's a cardboard cut out.
I don't know if you plan on using these characters again but if so PLEASE develop them more instead of focusing on art/design, those are not as important!
heres some links that might help you:
creepypasta-misery.deviantart.…
invaderika.deviantart.com/art/…
invaderika.deviantart.com/art/…
this one especially, if your characters are insane/have a mental illness
invaderika.deviantart.com/art/…
and invaderika.deviantart.com/art/…
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lornii In reply to ChubbPanda [2016-03-03 05:37:17 +0000 UTC]
Like I said, it's just my thoughts. If you respond like that to people that are genuinely interested in your ocs and you don't have a reply, you're not going to have a good time. People are going to ask questions about your characters, like why they're insane, you can't just respond with uh
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