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Published: 2005-09-06 18:45:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 73; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 14
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“What can I do for you, Mr. Morten?”
“I want to help get this man proven innocent.”
The lawyer sighed; he knew how difficult it would be to enable any evidence of Tom’s to count in a court of law. They talked for a while, when it was interrupted by Tom’s phone.
The other side of the phone line was a panicky voice, barely recognisable as a detective.
“Sir, erm… I need your assistance.”
The phone line went dead.
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I think it's good. Very short and concise, but it stops too soon...
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This page was a little short, but you did make it a nice break point.
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Let's see...constructive.
This reminds me of the book of microfiction I'm currently reading. The problem is that, with few words, a mystery story is hard to convey and be coherent. My suggestion is to make it longer. The end would be more effective if there was more plot before it.
On the other hand, if you've achieved the effects that you wanted, it's excellent.
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Thank you.. kinda rushed and pressured into writing at the moment.. will make alterations
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