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Published: 2006-03-18 22:20:54 +0000 UTC; Views: 340; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 13
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Description Have driven me this far



Just keep pushing, I dare you



Sometimes it looks quite inviting



You could come visit sometime



When all this gets too much



Until then I'll write your words



Over and around my arm



Until then, keep pushing



Pushing until you can't push any more



Then you'll understand



Why I wrote your words



Over my arms



Trying to understand your motive



But now I just stare at them



Ripping at my skin
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Comments: 13

rastill [2006-06-15 16:46:48 +0000 UTC]

Nice, for me this dumps a page full of anger down your throat in a few lines. I like the rythym, keeps pounding at you.

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to rastill [2006-06-15 17:34:26 +0000 UTC]

i must say. i do like your 'dumps a page full of anger down your throat' comment

thank you.

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rastill In reply to clinicallybeyondhelp [2006-06-15 17:36:34 +0000 UTC]

your welcome, sorry about taking so long..I tend to save poetry and prose till last, it takes longer to wrap you mind around

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to rastill [2006-06-15 17:46:35 +0000 UTC]

its okay. i understand that. <3

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darkdescartes [2006-05-18 13:47:12 +0000 UTC]

You begin the poem with "Have driven me this far". Who has driven you this far?

But otherwise nice job at eliminating unnecessary words to make a minimalistic poem. Are there any specifications you'd like to make or is it meant to be this vague?

Future critiques will be more in-depth, I promise. This one just doesn't have much wrong with it.

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to darkdescartes [2006-05-18 19:22:50 +0000 UTC]

<3

thanks.

*dances*

i like you XD

thanks muchies for the add. it will be returned.

xx

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thegreatmizuti [2006-03-31 18:44:13 +0000 UTC]

the words are blury..?? hmm good poem but still the words i can make out seem familure

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to thegreatmizuti [2006-04-02 09:19:55 +0000 UTC]

they're not meant to be readable for copywrite matters.
they're not mine.
go figure.
x

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thegreatmizuti In reply to clinicallybeyondhelp [2006-04-02 18:54:53 +0000 UTC]

i see hmm seeing lol

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to thegreatmizuti [2006-04-10 16:53:28 +0000 UTC]

XD

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pnub-x [2006-03-18 23:21:21 +0000 UTC]

woah, very very well writen

cool, but dark, and very spooky, especially from u lol

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clinicallybeyondhelp In reply to pnub-x [2006-03-27 16:08:46 +0000 UTC]

^.^

that's nice of you to say

*i think*

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pnub-x In reply to clinicallybeyondhelp [2006-03-27 22:45:07 +0000 UTC]

i was intending a positive comment lol, just scared me a little.. u have a history with me remember lol

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