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clouded-dreamer — ONE WORTH STEALING
Published: 2009-01-18 16:01:28 +0000 UTC; Views: 107; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 1
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Description Your eyes are absurdly blue,
Description does them no justice.
They lack a metaphor shining through,
Their innocence so steady and clean.
They hide no ego behind them,
looking out into a world,
still innocent and pure.
As if living in the Garden of Eden,
Well before the serpent came,
with its devious, cunning allure.
Spoilt from all the attention,
Yet without cynicism or piousness.
They lack self-indulgence,
But lead me just short,
Of any chance of contention.
If only for purpose of debate,
The eyes were indeed the window,
Leading down into the soul,
Yours would be without doubt,
Your most illustrious trait.
And one worth stealing.
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Comments: 10

prelude2before [2009-01-18 23:10:32 +0000 UTC]

yet another excellent piece of work. keep it up

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clouded-dreamer In reply to prelude2before [2009-01-18 23:30:12 +0000 UTC]

thank you, I haven't been able to get these words out of my head for days, but I just didn't feel ready to post it until I did. I feel so relieved now that it's over.

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prelude2before In reply to clouded-dreamer [2009-01-18 23:40:42 +0000 UTC]

it reminds me of how i feel when i get a glance from a certain someone's eyes. it makes me melt. i always wanted to right a poem on this certain someone's eyes but i figured there wasn't enough i could say about them to make it flow like a work of art. you pulled it off my friend. so thank you for writing what i could not. for it takes an army to get the feelings of a single soul across in a lifetime

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clouded-dreamer In reply to prelude2before [2009-01-19 00:11:52 +0000 UTC]

Sometimes all it takes is a good sleep, waking up, and then remembering your dream. For even when I sleep, I dream of her eyes.

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Achuzu [2009-01-18 21:49:06 +0000 UTC]

Very sweet poem.

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bright-eyes25 [2009-01-18 19:03:03 +0000 UTC]

boring hazel-brown eyes? i doubt that very much.
this is beautifully written. well done.

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clouded-dreamer In reply to bright-eyes25 [2009-01-18 23:32:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you.
But yes...boring hazel eyes. I shall have to post a close up pic when I can be bothered finding the software for my camera for macs.
I am happy with myself for the most part, but I do wish I had storytelling eyes.

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bright-eyes25 In reply to clouded-dreamer [2009-01-19 23:39:33 +0000 UTC]

pssh, i'm your eyes are lovely. everyone has there own personal-individual eye color, a color that no one can mimic exactly. i always thought mine were nothing to speak of, but having hazel/green eyes does have it's perk.

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clouded-dreamer In reply to bright-eyes25 [2009-01-19 23:58:47 +0000 UTC]

wow hazel green...you my friend are lucky!
my eyes are so brown that you cant see any distinguishing features...
which in itself is a feature i suppose

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bright-eyes25 In reply to clouded-dreamer [2009-01-20 02:04:14 +0000 UTC]

lol, yeah i guess i am lucky then.
but i bet your eye color is just as lucky.

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