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Published: 2003-12-29 02:23:48 +0000 UTC; Views: 68; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 5
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Hey, I think I've got the hang of this deviation thing.... Alright!This is a poem I wrote about a year ago. It was my last graded high school English assignment, an original poem of at least 14 lines. I penned these thoughts of where I was and my future in a metaphorical epic. I never expected it to be worth anything. But my parents got a hold of it and it got read aloud at my graduation ceremony.... then everyone was like, " Great poem, Ryan!" Is it really that good?
BTW, the sixth line refers to a ship's first voyage, so you know.
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Hey thanx for your commment. I am happy you added me to ur favorutes. But i am in wow that u did. your stuff is much more idk mature to me. and ur feelings look as if they are more in depth then mine can ever be. but i have not been on this site long and i am amazed that people like yourself liek my stuff. thank you again. but i think your is much better.
~lestat~
~Dark And Soulless~
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Why, thank you. Glad you like it.
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Some afterthoughts: I apologize for the poem's length, but I hope you enjoyed it. Bear in mind I wrote this poem at a time when I was just beginning to discover my talent for writing. (I idn't think I could even write poetry back then, now I love to write!). My new stuff is better, like "The Rain."
If my frequent references to God have offended you, I apologize, but make no guarantees that He won't show up in future deviations. He gave me what talent I have, and I think I should give credit where credit's due.
Also, I just noticed that my references to wind and seagulls kinda sound like The Wind Waker. I think that might have influenced my metaphor, but I can't remember if LoZ:TWW was even out at the time I wrote this. Cool anyway.... Peace. ^_^V
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Interesting work. I like the metaphor in this, and the piece progresses really well...nice imagery too. It has a sense of hope to it, i'm not sure why.
Great work anyway, I loved reading it.
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Thanks, I thought the metaphor was good too. I love metaphors, that's why I posted it.
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Yes, it really is that good. By the way, what grade did you get on it?
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Strange, but I got an A. My teacher said she wished she could give me more than an A... I don't know why, I didn't think it was that good. I still don't think it's THAT good, but I'll admit that it does have a good emotional feel. Thanks for the comment.
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