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Published: 2002-10-25 20:17:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 190; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 7
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There is slight azure,About my troublesome sky.
Sparkling - from your eyes.
S. Cheeseman.
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wow, looking back at the last 2 lines of my previous comment a long time ago
(in my comment)
that really does suck
haha
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2 fewer sounds in that last line and you'd have a haiku!
and the repetition of azure could be dropped
regardless, I liked it.
(this might suck..but in case it doesn't...somehow, I DID just make this up)
curiosity may have killed the cat,
but simplicity saved it.
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I agree with *etoilerose , if you take out 'azure' from the last line, this is perfect.
Magnificant poem.
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The parodox element in this is great. I enjoy your simple sytle.
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yes simple...to the point...an epic is not always needed to get a point across...I usually just call mine quotes though...lol
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awesome! it's almost a haiku...if you just took out "sparkling" form the last line. or azure...anywoo i like the simplicity as well.
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