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Cypherphoenix — Admit It
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Description "Admit it, you like me."

He knew he wasn't going to like this conversation the moment he stepped into the hall. She was alone, looking into the waters of the bay below. Waiting. Unease had crept into the pit of his stomach as he approached her, asking if everything was alright. Something different shone in her eyes, something he could not identify. He was wracking his mind for a label when it was replaced with overconfidence—the kind one summons when they   are nervous. The kind she summons when she's nervous. That's when her words rang through the arena's majestic hall.

And he did. He liked her a lot. When Bolin had been taken, she had been there to help him more than she could ever realize. Not only had she helped rescue Bolin from Amon's mysterious clutches, but she had saved him from himself. What he would do without Bolin… he didn't want to think about it. Growing up, his worst nightmares were those of being separated from his brother. The firebender who had killed their parents coming back to deal the last blow to Mako's perseverance. His brother getting wrapped up with the Triads and paying with his life. Recently he had one where his brother simply left to live with one of his fangirls. Not just any fangirl—more than just a fangirl. He left to live in the South Pole with Korra. It wasn't just the notion of his brother being gone that left him terrified in the morning. In that dream he had lost Korra too.

He knew that his brother had a thing for the fierce avatar. He knew that Korra couldn't stay in Republic City her whole life. He knew that if and when she needed to leave—that if Bolin wanted to accompany her—he couldn't deny them their freedom. That was why, now, he was looking away from her, telling her that, "No, I don't."
Neither was convinced.

He didn't look up at her. He knew her eyes would be either filled with questions, or hurt. He could not handle either. So he continued past her, to where, he knew not.

"Mako, wait." Her voice was so neutral, so monotone. He complied. "Look at me." He didn't.

Her hand found his face, and he knew he was going to have to look. So he steeled himself, not backing from this challenge. When she lifted his chin, he stared straight in her eyes, as masked as he could muster.

And she stared back, searching and finding the answers despite his visage.

"I can admit it," she said softly. "I like you."

Hearts and minds do not think alike, and despite his calculated left-brained way of thinking his heart got the first say this time, skipping. As a result he inhaled sharply before shaking his head.

"That has nothing to do with it." His voice was strained despite his attempts to keep it clear.

And so she looked further. It didn't take long. "Bolin…"

He averted his eyes.

"Mako," she paused, waiting for his eyes to return. They didn't. She sighed. "He hasn't told you yet?"

His brow furrowed. "Hasn't told me what?"

"That he doesn't like me… like that. He was saying something about watching us interact during our practices and our celebrations. He was telling me about all the times you watched his back and helped him out. He wanted to return the favor."

He shook his head again as if in disbelief; searching her face, her eyes, for the answer. "When did you talk about all of this?"

She thought a moment, her eyes searching in the ceiling. "About 10 minutes ago? We got on the topic of my feelings and well, he gave me some very Bolin-esque advice. So here I am."
He'd heard all about Bolin's advice throughout the years. The idea brought a small quirk to his lips. "You actually listened to Bolin's 'Dating Tips?'"

A smile came to her as well, her eyebrows raised ever so slightly. "Well, it's not that absurd is it? I mean, he knows you better than anyone else."

He nodded, "this is true."

"So," she captured his eyes with her own once more, eyebrows raised expectantly, "have you had a change of heart, then?"

He swallowed. He had not been prepared for this confrontation at all. "No."

The shine in her eyes had dulled as her face fell into the most confused expression he had ever seen. "But I've had a change of mind." He almost winced at his words. That was so cheesy what were you thinking. Obviously not a whole lot because this is Korra we're talking about, why couldn't you have said someth—

His train of thought was interrupted by her smile. It was too brilliant; his mind shut down, leaving its responsibilities with the overactive organ in his chest. His arms folded around her waist and they met one another half way, lips interlocking. When they finally had to break for oxygen content smiles ghosted their faces. Her eyes, however, held a daring sparkle in them. "Admit it," she said, pressing her nose to his in adoration. He lifted her then, pressing another kiss to her mouth. She smiled against the kiss, snaking her arms around his neck before returning it.

"I like you."
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Comments: 68

WrittenWroteWrite [2013-06-08 19:37:26 +0000 UTC]

AWWW!! i love this!!!! Bolin advice for the win!!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to WrittenWroteWrite [2013-06-10 04:10:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much

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WrittenWroteWrite In reply to Cypherphoenix [2013-06-10 13:56:58 +0000 UTC]

you are soo welcome! it was great!

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Thanatosstorm [2013-04-19 08:24:05 +0000 UTC]

Very well writ.

You did a wonderful job of describing a 'he', which actually led me to believe that the author was a man in the beginning. To find out it was a young lady of 18... 17 at the time of this writing? Well, surprised is the least of my emotions at that point.

I believe you ought to continue to use that art to inspire your own writing skills. You have great descriptions, not too long in sentence structure (I tend towards run-on sentences, myself), and you know how to break up the wording of characters very well. Although, perhaps for the last bit, it might have helped to put his reaction in there.

God bless you and yours.

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Cypherphoenix In reply to Thanatosstorm [2013-04-20 01:17:19 +0000 UTC]

Wow, it has been so long since I've had any really nice comments like this about my writing! Thank you so much for taking the time to write it out. I'm usually so skeptical of my writing (mostly because I fear I'll botch characterization) that I have a hard time finding my muse. Writing males is particularly difficult because, well, I am not one so I'm thrilled to know I did pretty good on this one. Thank you for the suggestion

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Thanatosstorm In reply to Cypherphoenix [2013-04-20 06:07:33 +0000 UTC]

It's quite alright. One thing I can say, though, is that sometimes it helps to just let the character be. Of course, I always speak from the perspective of how I would think when it comes to a male, but the same doesn't work with a woman, since I'm a man. So I generalize a little bit and try not to think 'okay, how does a woman think'? I think 'how does a person who is in this sort of situation think'? Eventually, it starts to flow, and I let things develop from the rough narrative as I go.

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JackieStarSister [2012-08-01 02:03:22 +0000 UTC]

I loved the picture that inspired this, and I think you did a great job with this story. I especially liked Mako's thoughts in the third paragraph.

I don't understand what you mean when you say Korra "saved him from himself". Are you referring to Mako or Bolin?

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Cypherphoenix In reply to JackieStarSister [2012-08-01 04:32:44 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much~

I could imagine Mako being very confused about what to do with himself after the one thing that kept him going had been taken from him, so Korra was literally saving Mako from himself when she helped saved Bolin. Things he might have done and later regretted.

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JackieStarSister In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-08-01 12:23:46 +0000 UTC]

I guess I can see that. I once thought of comparing Mako to Jet, since they both lost their parents at a young age. I think the reason Mako didn't turn out so angry and vengeful was because he had a younger brother to protect and take care of. Bolin gave him a purpose in life, a good, lovable purpose.

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Cypherphoenix In reply to JackieStarSister [2012-08-01 22:27:04 +0000 UTC]

Exactly! And if Bolin was taken away, who knows what he'd do?

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Lobomon199 [2012-06-25 20:16:12 +0000 UTC]

I absolutely love this! Mako, WHY DIDN'T YOU KISS HER IN THE FIRST PLACE

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Cypherphoenix In reply to Lobomon199 [2012-06-26 08:53:33 +0000 UTC]

Hehe I'm glad you liked it! C:

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Pixelkhiin [2012-05-01 14:33:56 +0000 UTC]

it was perfect.... so perfect................................................ YOU STILL DESERVE THIS MAKO. * punches Mako for episode 4*

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Cypherphoenix In reply to Pixelkhiin [2012-05-01 23:55:43 +0000 UTC]

I agree with you x)

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Pixelkhiin In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-05-02 00:01:41 +0000 UTC]

XD It seems everyone does *kicks Mako's groaning form as she says this*

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Dragonlover1356 [2012-04-30 04:16:47 +0000 UTC]

aaaawwwww!!! I love it!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to Dragonlover1356 [2012-05-01 00:34:58 +0000 UTC]

Eee thanks so much! C:

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MrsIshida0560 [2012-04-27 23:25:31 +0000 UTC]

eep! i love it!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to MrsIshida0560 [2012-04-27 23:58:45 +0000 UTC]

Ah! I'm so glad C:

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MrsIshida0560 In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-28 01:36:18 +0000 UTC]

^^

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ChaseClouds [2012-04-24 20:05:07 +0000 UTC]

Much better written than most Makorra fanfictions.

Same idea, so it lacks originality.

But very beautifully written. C:

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Cypherphoenix In reply to ChaseClouds [2012-04-24 21:16:38 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! And yes, I realize it's not very original-- I just saw the picture and couldn't resist x)

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shurtugal1993 [2012-04-24 16:45:32 +0000 UTC]

That was great, I never knew you could write like that

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Cypherphoenix In reply to shurtugal1993 [2012-04-24 21:17:19 +0000 UTC]

Hehe thanks~ Yeah I don't have a lot of time to sit down and actually finish something like it.

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nymre [2012-04-24 16:42:00 +0000 UTC]

awesome i love it! <3 lol 'bolin's dating tips' xDD
this is a way better story than I had in mind while drawing

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Cypherphoenix In reply to nymre [2012-04-24 21:18:12 +0000 UTC]

Hehe! I'm really glad that you liked it~ I couldn't help myself after seeing your picture x)

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brainysmurf97 [2012-04-24 11:28:48 +0000 UTC]

Awwwwwww I love Itt!!!!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to brainysmurf97 [2012-04-24 21:17:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it~

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ILOVEJIMHAWKINS [2012-04-24 02:27:04 +0000 UTC]

Cute.

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Cypherphoenix In reply to ILOVEJIMHAWKINS [2012-04-24 02:42:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks C:

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ILOVEJIMHAWKINS In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 02:44:20 +0000 UTC]

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KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-24 02:12:47 +0000 UTC]

Nice. I feel like I'm reading dialogue for a future episode. Well done!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-24 02:21:50 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh thanks C: We can only hope, right? I'm glad you enjoyed it~

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KaeporaGaebora3 In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 02:27:51 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha. Yeah. I just hope that they kinda prolong it. Like Katara and Aang. So that way they can develope the relationship further. Rather than justify it with teen hormones. >.<

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Cypherphoenix In reply to KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-24 02:56:14 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I figure they will. But with their only being 12 episodes in the first book they probably won't show a lot of their day to day interaction-- just bigger moments in their development.

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KaeporaGaebora3 In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 04:08:54 +0000 UTC]

Yeah. I forgot that not everyday has action packed.... action. xD I just wonder how much time passes from the beginning to end of the 1st season....

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Cypherphoenix In reply to KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-24 04:15:07 +0000 UTC]

Yep, it's one of the vast mysteries we will not find out about until later.

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KaeporaGaebora3 In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 04:16:09 +0000 UTC]

In the mean time, (X_X) <--- My face waiting for new episodes.

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Cypherphoenix In reply to KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-24 04:29:26 +0000 UTC]

Oh yes, I have been having magnitude 3 heart attacks everyday because I want it to be Saturday so badly.

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KaeporaGaebora3 In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 22:56:02 +0000 UTC]

Well, Goodluck on not dying till then! xD I would never forgive myself if I died before the series finale. lol. Idk if that was a little dark?

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Cypherphoenix In reply to KaeporaGaebora3 [2012-04-25 00:53:19 +0000 UTC]

Lol no, not too dark. Good advice though!

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FlotaingArtist2435 [2012-04-24 02:10:51 +0000 UTC]

This is very well written. Insanely nice job!!

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Cypherphoenix In reply to FlotaingArtist2435 [2012-04-24 02:25:24 +0000 UTC]

Ahhh thanks so much! I really appreciate it.

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hpswst101 [2012-04-24 01:47:59 +0000 UTC]

I think you did a marvelous job. I hope it does go something like that in canon.
hpswst101

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Cypherphoenix In reply to hpswst101 [2012-04-24 02:26:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much! We can wish~

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xXrosanneXx [2012-04-24 01:38:37 +0000 UTC]

Cute x1000. ^^

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Cypherphoenix In reply to xXrosanneXx [2012-04-24 01:43:38 +0000 UTC]

Eee thanks so much~

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xXrosanneXx In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 01:44:28 +0000 UTC]

No problem! It's well written, too. ^^

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Cypherphoenix In reply to xXrosanneXx [2012-04-24 01:45:27 +0000 UTC]

I'm very glad you think so C:

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xXrosanneXx In reply to Cypherphoenix [2012-04-24 19:52:22 +0000 UTC]

^^

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