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Published: 2006-07-03 19:40:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 342; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 6
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i don't want to be a historylost or unnoticed among others
i don't want to have a story
that keeps me from being another
i don't want to sleep every night
and wake every morning so tired
i don't want to die just one time
dying to know why-
i don't want to sit in my room
and wait for anything to change
i want to make a story
that keeps me from being others
i don't want to fear every dream
hate and cry in my sleep
i want to die just one day
knowing that i won't notice-
i want to die just one day
knowing that i will finish it
and that you will notice.
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Comments: 8
that's why I love your poems. they flow so nicely and are usually so powerful and emotional.
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they flow nicely? wow. thank you 
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Wow, I really liked. There's something so sweet about your words, I just enjoy reading them so.
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sweet? you think? well, thank you.
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The feeling is strong but i think structure in your pieces is something you could work on. In this one i think it would help if you were to decide whether or not you really want it to rhyme. . at the beginning it does but as you continue you lose it. I think you could possibly revisit this and choose what kind of structure you would like it to have, either rhyming or not im sure would do very well but i think it would be positive if you were to choose one or the other.
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i didn't even realize it rhymed at the beginning xD . i didn't do it on purpose 
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haha. . thats interesting. . lol. . well. . good luck anyway
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