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Page 5 of my Fan Comic . My Bro did the text for the most of this page. If there are any new comers that are reading this, you can check out my gallery and there's a folder with all of my other 4 pages of this comic I've done so far. Written by Matthew (my bro) & Me
Danny Phantom and all characters (c) Butch Hartman, Nickelodeon & Viacom
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...No, seriously, where's the rest? *pleading*
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Sadly it's in my head =__=. I'm kind of glad that I took a break, since my writing was really bad. i never noticed until I took COMP I in college this last semester. I'm so sorry that I haven't been able to finish this comic 
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I'm hoping to have it up by the next couple of days or by the end of the week 
Thanks for the comment, I was starting to wonder if some people didn't care to see the next page 
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the sooner the better Dan rules
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still no next page to bad let me know wen its finished
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more soon please 
you did a really good job on this one
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page 5??? I Wanna See The Other Ones!!!!!! >.<
where are them??? รณ-รฒ T.T
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Yay more comic!
Though, as I've been taking comic book illustration lately, there are a few things that are bothering me. They're little things, and I'm sure it won't be a problem to fix, or at least keep in mind, heh.
One of them is, the text. The words are fine, but the placement bothers me. Because it seems to me that your brother was trying to cram all of Walker's words in one area. As a result, he covered some of the interesting details in your panels.
A general rule my prof taught me is that you should keep about 1/3 of a panel empty, or otherwise uninteresting, for dialog placement. You did that for the first few panels, which is good, but your brother did not take advantage of this to split up Walker's monologue, which I feel can be spread over three panels.
The second problem is that towards the end, you start centering your figures. My prof advised that often off-center figures look more visually appealing.
Just my two cents, though. ^^
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I was actually trying to cover up some stuff with it, yeah I know I was being a lazy artist, but I tried for like a half an hour to make Dan look like he was bent over and attach to the cement block, that pose was just too much, so I just cover it up with the dialog box
Yeah the 1/3 space I was also trying to do, but this page was drawn up like a year ago and I just wanted it to be finished and put up here on DA so I could move on and back than I didn't know a lot. Ohhh . . . I think I see what you mean about spreading the words around, I'll see if I can change that. Even myself was confused on how and where to put Walker's dialog.
I thought I did off center them, I always try to do that, guess that's how they came out 
Thanks so much for your critique on my work, it's so great to hear from somebody who is actually go to a class and knows some stuff. 
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You're welcome, dear.
Yes, I completely understand how complicated kneeling poses can be. They're the bane of my existence.
I'm just glad I'm now qualified to give this advice, myself.
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