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So now I put two things in here that made my head hurt, cloud vore and cloud drifting? I'm lost on what I draw...anyways ANOTHER PAGE!
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Hey there, This is a comic book idea I have about the show My Little Pony Friendship is Magic. I'm doing this because I'm a fan of the series and want to give back to the community with something that I can do best, go as deep as possible with the lore that is Nightmare Moon.
synopsis:
After Princess Celestia and her younger sister, Princess Luna, gained prosperity over the new continent Equesrtia, they established a order to rule the land in fair honesty and Respect to everypony kind. Princess Celestia would raise the sun, while younger her younger sister would raise the moon. Together the two sisters bound a pact to keep to there duties and create harmony and balance for there subjects and those they cared for, those that lived on the land they helped fix to live and laugh upon. They kept order and Balance Keeping the Sun up during the day, and the Moon at night. But not all was well, as they say as time grew, so did the younger sister's wants and needs of hating constantly being shut out. Since at night everypony sleeps and simply can not play. Due to Luna's appeal of protecting the night, means that everypony sleeps while she guards them, never speaking to them, only silence So this is where our story starts. Princess Luna decides to take a flight stroll in the Equestrian skys, going about her night, as we would go about our day. These are the days before everything the two sisters knew and didn't know would change there lives forever. From the moment they placed there hooves on the soil they stand upon, there fate were sealed. Not even the Elements of Harmony, a power Celestia discovered to help her and her sister aid in battle to bring down the evil of the land, the symbolizing strength she kept close to her heart to guide herself, her sister and the world she cared for, all of this and still...nopony could see this coming.
and so our story beings.
Chapter 1: The Moon Princess
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I DO NOT IN ANY way work with Hasbro, I HAVE NOTHING to do with Hasbro, or create anything for Hasbro or anything to do with working on My Little Pony Freindship is Magic for Hasbro, it's characters or logos belong to Hasbo. I have full rights to fair creations. I have no intentions on making any profit off of anything to do with Hasbro or My Little Pony. I WILL NOT make any profit off of "The Fallen Moon" A orginal story describing what I THINK happened before Luna Became Nightmare moon and the events that lead up too it. Now get lost Copyright.
My Little Pony friendship is magic ©
Studio B (DHX) and Hasbro. All rights reserved to them.
Illustration and drawing, storyboard design and script by AJ Morga.
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Comments: 7
I find this to be a real interesting take on Princess Luna's lore. The artwork so far is real breathtaking with much of the work so far showing her frolicking around in the air and playing among the clouds. A real lighthearted look at how she spends her spare time and a reminder that even princesses need to take a break to unwind. Especially after a millennium of banishment, in Luna's case!
The expressions and action-like poses really do a good job of conveying the fact that she's having fun exploring and performing daring aerial maneuvers. It's like she's curious to see all the wonders of Equestria she's missed out on the last thousand years. Nice job also with the effects her maneuvers have on the clouds...which apparently don't stand a chance against the flailing limbs of a joyful night princess. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
My one nitpickie is the last panel. I can see Luna in the panel but I felt a bit strained to look for her there, tucked into the very top of the panel and almost invisible against the dark background. Until I noticed her there, I almost thought it was a switch in the story to something else that was going on meanwhile in the city. Then I saw Luna after looking hard and realized, aha! She is flying toward the city.
It's still a great panel! It's just that Luna has been the center of attention in every panel thus far and perhaps placing her more towards the center would make her more visible to the reader, focusing attention on her and giving a clearer idea of what's going on and where she's headed.
Overall, I'm really invested in this project of yours and look forward to more of Luna's character development. It's clear from the artwork and backstory that you're putting a lot of effort into this to give something to the community. I appreciate that and hope to see more of this comic, so keep calm and flutter on dood. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/h/h… " width="47" height="16" alt="
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Your artwork is really amazing, but there is something in your description that bothers me a bit.
'there' means something is in a certain place. Like for example: 'the cake is there' or 'Where's the bathroom?' - 'It's over there'
The word you're looking for is 'their' For example:: 'create harmony and balance for their subjects.'
It's just that you made this little mistake every time you used the word and it disrupts the flow of the text a lot.
I hope you won't take it as an insult that I pointed this out.
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You are forgetting to add links to the newer pages to the descriptions of the older ones.
I would have left, had the more like this box not shown subsequent pages.
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wow theres not one part i dont like
the style , story colors -love the lot
have to fav+watch for more of this
=^_^=
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The coloring is simply awesome! Also, dat expression in the penultimate panel
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