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DarlingDisaster — Incendiary
Published: 2010-03-21 01:47:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 405; Favourites: 12; Downloads: 2
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Description it started with a cinder
that smoldered beneath my skin
one burning little ember
was how it did begin

a fire lit inside me
with flames so white with heat
and it crept along my fingers
and from my head down to my feet

I became but ashes
when your fire did burn out
a girl became a tortured frame
my body a ruined house

and now the wind has swept me
from the east coast to the west
all evidence erased
in one wily tempest
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Comments: 9

MidnightSun16 [2010-04-17 02:44:04 +0000 UTC]

i love the simple rhyme.
and the concept is captures such an intense mood.

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wyldhoney [2010-04-09 19:15:22 +0000 UTC]

It's great how you maintain the flow within the narrative, the blend between the two is just perfect.

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Kayteemaybelate [2010-04-01 00:39:55 +0000 UTC]

awesome poem! I like the metaphors.
sometimes rhyming can make poems sound weird or silly but not in this one. nice job!

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DarlingDisaster In reply to Kayteemaybelate [2010-04-01 00:45:09 +0000 UTC]

Well thank you, and I know what you mean about the rhyming thing, which is why I used to never write poems that rhymed but lately everythings just sort of been coming out that way. It's a little strange haha. But anyways, thanks so much for taking the time to comment.

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rlkirkland [2010-03-31 23:30:06 +0000 UTC]

A well carried concept

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DarlingDisaster In reply to rlkirkland [2010-04-01 00:35:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much for the kind word

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rlkirkland In reply to DarlingDisaster [2010-04-01 00:38:08 +0000 UTC]

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tlhunt [2010-03-21 02:04:07 +0000 UTC]

I love this one!! I feel like this!! How can you possibly know what... how ... I mean ... Wow!!

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DarlingDisaster In reply to tlhunt [2010-03-21 02:08:15 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha, well thank you.

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