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dave-llamaman — Vanguard: First Contact. Chapter 2.
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Published: 2016-09-06 18:31:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 865; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 0
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Chapter 2 for your perusal. Several more major characters introduced, and the first mention of one of our heroes' backstory. Opinions, thoughts, critiques etc. are appreciated. Is it easy enough to follow? Is the dialogue written in a way that real people speak, rather than an author's poor approximation of how people actually speak? And most importantly, is it any good?Other chapters can be found here: Prologue ; Chapter 1 ; Chapter 3 ; Chapter 4 & 5 ; Chapter 6 ; Chapter 7 ; Chapter 8 ; Chapter 9 ; Chapter 10 ; Chapter 11 ; Chapter 12 ; Chapter 13
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Hmmm so now I'm curious what exactly happened to create this vendetta. And why Chen would want to be in charge of a likely disastrous first contact? ^_^
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All will be explained in Chapter 3. Or Chapter 4, not sure which yet
Incidentally, Chen doesn't want to be in charge of the mission, he's pretty much spent his career flying a desk. He's just trying to force Daniels out of the service, partly to discredit anything he might say but also because he doesn't like him. Yes he really is that petty.
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Ah that makes sense for Chen then. With all that they said in the first chapter about the danger of this suicidal mission, I couldn't imagine a political creature wanting to risk his ass on it. But if he's petty enough to see just the victory over Daniels, it makes perfect sense. I look forward to your next installment sir
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I believe I mentioned these difficulties before, but I think I've got a better grasp of things now. Your writing seems composed of two components. On the one, you have the narrative, which is predominantly dialogue based and works very functionally. On the other, you occasionally have narration blocks that seem more like something taken from a history textbook.
It's interesting. You write stories with far more characters than I typically have in mine. As such, there are altogether different considerations. I feel like I'm swimming upstream just to catch up, but most people are used to this.
I enjoyed this quite a bit, but I didn't really get into it until the soldiers' stories.
Can't help but asking, have you played any of the Wing Commander titles?
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