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Published: 2011-08-11 22:12:49 +0000 UTC; Views: 2453; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 0
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I'm not sure if I'm done yet. But I'm not labeling it as a WIPFixed a ton of stuff. Shading, lighting, coloring, and I added a tornado that represents the 23 flavors. Actually, the recipe's not known, but I did get some of the main ingredients, such as the fruits.
Please help by giving constructive criticism
You can see the original here
EDIT: Made tornado a LOT shinier (MY EYES) and changed the font. Thanks, . I'll add the water and stuff later
EDIT2: Added some more shading and such. Still open to suggestions
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Comments: 46
Wow, this is fantastic! The action and sense of motion throughout this is just amazing!
I like the lighting especially, how it shines off the character and the Dr. Pepper bottle. The darker edges really helps us to focus on the main subjects
I'd say you did an amazing job with the shading, too! The pop bottle looks breathtakingly real, and the shading on the character is very good, too.
I think that perhaps the pop can the character is drinking is a little distorted - maybe it's the angle? I'm not sure, something just doesn't look quite right about it. :/
But I love how eye-catching this is - the bright colors and tornado and everything. Amazing work!
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Thanks
How did you come across this? The contest's over
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Oh, I saw it in the 'Targeted Commenting' article of #ProjectComment
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The concept I like, it would look better with less fog and that distracts a bit: S of the rest is fine
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Overall this is a really great piece. I think you did a nice job of balancing colors and composition overall.
I agree that the addition of bubbles or a more watery look to the tornado would help it look better. The can in his hands is also a bit awkward; it probably needs to stretch downward a bit more and be a little skinnier.
His expression is a little out of place--with all those flavors wouldn't he be super excited to have the can? Not eyes and mouth closed, but looking in awe at the tornado and mouth gaping open in anticipation for delicious Dr. Pepper!
I like how you added the extra cans in the background to echo the can in his hand, that's a nice touch.
Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest!
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Is it good now? I wasn't really sure what you meant when you said bubbles
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Thanks
He's content. The tornado is very commonplace in Dr. Pepper City.
Yep, still fixing the can and tornado
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You're welcome!
Oh okay...As for the bubbles, I can't tell if there are any changes yet (maybe my computer is being weird?), but I meant that they should go inside the tornado, considering carbonation is definitely part of the Dr. Pepper ingredients
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Ohhh, I put them inside the bottle near the left
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Hahaha, it's okay! I though I noticed them there, too.
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The colors and concept work very well with the theme. Great work!
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23 is a happy number its happy sequence is 23 13 10 1. one day ill find someone else who cares about that
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Haha if you Google this, you literally get a lot of issues
But seriously, what?
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take the number 23 square its digets and ad them to gether, the formula is 2x2+3x3 giving 13 you then do the same with 13 1x1+3x3 giving 10 and then you do the same with 10. If this prosses yields 1 then the number is happy if it doesnt it isnt. there are a lot of patterns that can be studied. I got a bit obsessed and built a macro to do the calculation for me so i could work out if i had a happy birthday. 123456 is happy 7 is happy and 28 is happy aswell as being a perfect number making it perfectly happy.
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the real world aplication for this is yet to be descovered
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That's actually interesting o_o
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yay! it was descovered by a mathamtition who 7 year old was given excersises as home work.
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Nice progress, and I like it.
My only comment would be that the "flavours" tornado that comes out of the box looks a bit solid. As if it was some paper cone stuck there. You should make it either look more "windy", with less defined edges, or more "liquid".
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Yea, I'm trying to make it more liquidy
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Dude, its stylish! the character holding the dr pepper is nicely drawed! and the picture just fits all together. Good Job!
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I was just comparing the original to this one, and you've improved it so much! 
I agree with ~gypsythecabbit that the can could do a little work. As well as correcting the perspective, I think that the can tab looks a little flat and could do with some shading.
Nice work! Good luck in the contest. C:
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Thank you so much
Still working on perspective
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You're welcome!
Perspective is always awkward to get right.
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I like it more than the other one, though there are some issues:
1) Shading, find the light source work from there, which places are darker and which are lighter. Since there are a lot of light sources its a bit harder, especially when they counteract.Exp.The tornado emitting light on the hat, and the little ball on the hat emits a shadow; The light would get rid of part of the shadow on the hat because a new light source has been made.
2)The background is good, but it's not a wide variety of POV. From my own experience, you most likely just made one DP can and bottle, understandable, though having the effect of randomized facings gives a little more "flavor". All the Cans and Bottles are facing the same way, there for only giving one side for all, making it a bit boring. THOUGH it does show off the character and his purpose more.
3)Honestly, I like it. But it is 2:30 A.M I can't help out if I don't even understand what I'm saying, lets see what happens when I'm actually awake.
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Thanks. I can't find the layer that has the little ball's shadow
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It looks kinda flat and one dimensional. Although the coloring and light are decent.
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What do you mean by the fact that it's flat? And if it's one dimensional, it would consist of points
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It doesn't really pop, but I guess its not that much your fault as an artist its just the style you drew it in. Like some artists make these eccentric drawings that you can determine distance/placement , a volume of an object. This art piece reminds me kind of south park style art. BTW im going to bed Im a look through the rest of your work tomorrow.
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Yea, I'm still working on depth
And you only had to look at one of my art 
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I think the hat is up too high for the character's head, especially considering that a hat would droop or look flattened if it were up that high. Either that, of your character has too much hair/skull.
The can looks weird from that perspective. Try making it narrower or taller if you still can. Look at an actual can of Dr. Pepper (or any old soda can will do) for reference. Better if you have one with you at the moment.
The tornado of flavors is an interesting concept, by the way. The colors mix nicely, though you should probably remove the lineart for the fruit so they more natural and go better with the motion of that tornado, if that makes sense. Just try it and compare. Also, is that a vanilla flower there?
I'm not much of a design savvy, though you should probably try out a different font to catch more attention.
I like the way you colored the Dr. Pepper bottle. Just looking at it makes me wanna head to the store for one, lol. My only suggestion is you can add some little bubbles so it's easier to tell that it's a soda. Maybe play around with with the shading, though the shading looks believable enough considering it's around a bright light. Just take a look at this bottle for reference. [link]
Optional: Just for the sake of making it look tastier, since advertisements have a knack for making foods or drinks look godly, add water drips, as if it was taken out of a cooler. =3
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Thanks for the awesome tips
The hat's high up because the person's hair is VERY poofy and actually holds it up like that. I agree with the can perspective (prolly gonna fix that later) and yes, that is a vanilla flower
I'm still having trouble with the fonts. It seems that no matter what I do, they look a little weird Dx
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You can get some interesting fonts from fontsquirrel. Like I said, I'm not too wise on design, so I can't help you much there.
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Yeah, it's looking better!
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lol reminds me of kaito,
cuz of the blue hair and scarf.XP
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Actually, if you take the hat off, you'll see that the hair is a LOT poofier than Kaito
Plus his scarf is shinier i_i I WANT IT
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