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Delphi-is-Script — A Secret Wish
Published: 2012-11-28 02:45:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 242; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 2
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Description I have a secret.
Well, in reality I have many
But this one lives in the core of my heart
In a summer home filled with tropical breezes and warm sand
It's the future.
I'm walking down the aisle in my white dress,
Roses in my hair
And she's standing at the other end
So beautiful
Her hair is black and shining
Twisted raven curls that are in stark contrast to the fresh snow of her gown
Two year later, we sip coffee at home and do the crossword
Go out to dinner and joke around
I'm glowing
And a few months later she holds our child.
Stars above the cradle turn into star gazing on Sundays
I'm Mum and she's Mom.
Reading books aloud together in the evenings
Darling squished between us
First day of school.
Her raven hair begins to gray as the years fly past.
Feet on the staircase,
Tax returns, smiles, and game night.
She cries when our child goes off to college
We have the house to ourselves and flowers always bloom in the window sills.
I get to walk my daughter down the aisle,
She's so beautiful
Roses in her hair of black twisting curls
Like us.
Rocking chairs on the back porch
Wrinkles look more like laugh lines
And blooms still peak out of flower pots.
We may be fading,
But the last thing I'll remember as I slip away is her.
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Comments: 7

fictionfreak13 [2012-12-01 04:10:27 +0000 UTC]

This is really beautiful hon! I just realized that we never shared our poetry like we'd meant to on the Elephants...

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Delphi-is-Script In reply to fictionfreak13 [2012-12-01 17:59:01 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah... maybe next year or something

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AlleyCat042 [2012-11-28 03:12:11 +0000 UTC]

This is so beautiful, I love how you tied in the recurring motifs and phrases, it really brings the whole piece together. The last line is gorgeous in itself, a very melancholic but sweet way to artfully wrap up the poem. Gosh, this is so greatttt <3

The only thing I caught was a little grammatical slip:
"We have to house to ourselves"
by which I believe you meant
"We have the house to ourselves"

Other than that, I love it. <3

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Delphi-is-Script In reply to AlleyCat042 [2012-11-28 03:34:38 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! This is why I need to proof read my stuff xD

Also, yay. I didn't mean to tie it in at the start, but it happened and I'm really pleased with how it turned out.

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AlleyCat042 In reply to Delphi-is-Script [2012-12-01 20:44:50 +0000 UTC]

You should totally submit this to a contest or literary magazine or something! I just can't get over how much I love it. <3

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StevenAlister [2012-11-28 02:47:54 +0000 UTC]

...that's so cute

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Delphi-is-Script In reply to StevenAlister [2012-11-28 03:33:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks- ssh, don't tell

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