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The light of day drains from the sky,Trickling in channels to the earth.
Clouds curl amongst it,
Like wrinkles etched to its skin.
Coiled to the rope of time, the sun sinks on cue,
Lower and lower it goes..
The air is still. Quiet and cool.
A fire of colour erupts, shimmering and scattering the air,
across the horizon like a candle brought to life,
the sky explodes with vibrant colour, that a-blazes golden light.
Bursting at the seams, the sky is filled, it fills,
with the essence of the day departing.
Farwell my day, farewell.
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Comments: 20
AmethystWinds [2010-10-06 19:27:19 +0000 UTC]
Lovely - great flow! I love your personifications!
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Depplain-Graphix In reply to AmethystWinds [2010-10-06 23:57:24 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you think so!
My English teacher would be so proud!
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Kassi-Kamira [2010-07-02 22:12:10 +0000 UTC]
I like the way the entire poem flows together yet remains scattered somehow. To me, all the components are separate, but work into an entirety.
In the fifth line, I think you meant cue rather than que.
Overall, though; a very beautiful, moving piece.
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Depplain-Graphix In reply to Kassi-Kamira [2010-07-03 02:49:16 +0000 UTC]
Thank-you
It means a lot coming from you! You're literature is beautiful!
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Kassi-Kamira In reply to Depplain-Graphix [2010-07-03 06:39:58 +0000 UTC]
You're ever so welcome.
And thank you!
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PeacexLovexHope [2010-07-01 03:17:00 +0000 UTC]
This is very well done, and it's really quite beautiful! Great job!
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Depplain-Graphix In reply to PeacexLovexHope [2010-07-01 05:00:37 +0000 UTC]
Thankyou
I wrote it a while ago, and then saved it to my computer because I didn't feel it was 'polished up' enough. And then I rediscovered it the other day, tidied it up, and voila!
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PeacexLovexHope In reply to Depplain-Graphix [2010-07-01 05:01:46 +0000 UTC]
I love it when things like that happen! And you "polished it up" quite nicely!
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greentuxedo [2010-07-01 01:48:30 +0000 UTC]
farewell indeed! Love it, I think literature can be as, if not more inspiring than the visual arts. I really enjoyed reading through this, not many people post literature. Thanks for sharing!
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Depplain-Graphix In reply to greentuxedo [2010-07-01 04:56:59 +0000 UTC]
Thankyou! It means a lot to me to hear your positive feedback!
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ChainsawPicasso In reply to Depplain-Graphix [2010-07-07 18:18:44 +0000 UTC]
You are very welcome.
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Depplain-Graphix In reply to master-hearts [2010-06-30 15:08:02 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad you like it!
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