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Brittany loved basketball,Friends and parties too,
And when it came to painting,
That's all she wanted to do.
She painted everything she saw,
Birds, flowers, and the sky,
Some days she sat at her window,
And painted everything that passed her by.
But lately she'd been feeling woozy,
Her muscles ached a lot,
And her parents got kind of worried,
So they took her to the doc.
The doctor took a couple of tests,
To see if everything was okay,
Then the nurse came out with a look of sadness,
And this is what she had to say;
"I'm sorry, but you've got leukemia," she said,
"You've got about 3 months more."
Then Brittany got up, ran out of the room,
And slammed the office door.
She ran down the street screaming,
And cried her eyes out dry,
And stayed up all night,
Wondering what it's like to die.
Her parents held her tightly,
And said, "We love you,"
"We'll make your last few months the greatest,"
"We'll do anything for you."
So Brittany and her parents moved to Florida,
to live by the sea,
Because Brittany loved the ocean,
And when she died, that's where she wanted to be.
She spent her days painting,
And horseback riding in by the bay,
But one day she met this guy,
And his name was Jay.
They collected seashells together,
And talked about all kinds of things,
And then one day while walking,
He handed her a ring.
It said, "I love you,"
Which brought tears to Brittany's eyes,
And when he put it on her finger,
She began to cry.
He asked her what was wrong,
and she then replied, "I've got leukemia, and about a month more."
He said," No matter what, I love you
And no matter what, you are the one I adore."
So they spent everyday together,
And swam in the Atlantic all day,
But Brittany was getting weaker,
And it was hard for her stay awake.
So one day Brittany painted her picture, and gave it to Jay,
She said, "I want you to remember me, even when I leave this place."
But one day while they were walking,
And searching for seashells in the sand,
Brittany collapsed and started to lose her breath,
And said to Jay, "Please hold my hand"
"I love you more than anyone, You are my only true love,
But now my time is up, And I'll watch over you from above…"
Then Brittany's body was lifeless, as she lay in Jay's arms,
And he sat there all day, And kept her safe from harm.
I hope this teaches you a lesson.
To tell someone you love them whenever you can.
Because maybe they'll be gone tomorrow.
And you won't be there to hold their hand.
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Comments: 23
PrayofMidnight [2004-01-11 00:52:45 +0000 UTC]
its so good ..... its so good i'm crying *cry*...... so what u did to me...... i'll get you *cry's harder*..... dam!
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devildragonofhell In reply to Xanda [2003-11-24 17:58:13 +0000 UTC]
thnx i have got alot of positive output by alot of people
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Xanda In reply to devildragonofhell [2003-11-24 19:14:50 +0000 UTC]
so have i and i know that my poetry is not 100% perfect.
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devildragonofhell In reply to Xanda [2003-11-25 12:17:46 +0000 UTC]
if anyone thinks poetry is perfact i want to know what drug they are on because even world renoun poets have flaws
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devildragonofhell In reply to Xanda [2003-11-27 03:49:25 +0000 UTC]
did i say it or did you just think i said it :laugh:
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Xanda In reply to devildragonofhell [2003-12-02 18:28:32 +0000 UTC]
what you said about a poet having flaws that is what i was saying that you said sorry about the confusion...
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darkhellian [2003-11-15 01:19:12 +0000 UTC]
hey buddy. i finally got everything to work. my comp. my deviantart. everything. and i read what u wrote me. and well.. uhh... nice. but. ya and n e ways ure poem. very good. almost made me cry. so touching.
Morgan
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devildragonofhell In reply to darkhellian [2003-11-17 17:35:26 +0000 UTC]
thanx on the comment and it was a verry long time since i got5 to talk to you
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darkhellian In reply to devildragonofhell [2003-11-17 20:26:49 +0000 UTC]
ya. sorry. comp. caought fire. but its all better now. and u r never ever on the internet. at least not when i am.
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devildragonofhell In reply to darkhellian [2003-11-20 12:22:02 +0000 UTC]
that cas i doint have a comp at home and i can bareley use it at moms house
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LostTrust [2003-11-10 19:51:34 +0000 UTC]
i really like ur new poem it flows nicely very touching too
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psycholoser63 [2003-11-09 22:38:00 +0000 UTC]
its good i like it. its really good i think. good job on the ryhming too
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devildragonofhell In reply to psycholoser63 [2003-11-10 12:12:30 +0000 UTC]
thanx i think it is good also
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cokeandcandy [2003-11-09 04:19:45 +0000 UTC]
awee... its one of the best rhyming poems ive read in ages ! good job
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devildragonofhell In reply to cokeandcandy [2003-11-10 12:13:42 +0000 UTC]
thanx it was kinda hqrd to rhym it at some points
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onyxabrasion [2003-11-09 03:44:02 +0000 UTC]
Touching. My main problem, is you tend to lose rythm and I find that uber distracting.
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devildragonofhell In reply to onyxabrasion [2003-11-10 12:15:14 +0000 UTC]
ok i may have lost pace
im just glad i didnt lose face
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