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Published: 2004-06-27 17:47:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 227; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 19
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She isn’t answering.You check the door.
It’s unlocked?
You walk in. The music is so loud.
You see her beloved cat,
Walking out of her room…
With fresh blood on his paws.
You heart starts to pump harder.
He looks up at you with a pleading look
As a meowing cry escapes his mouth.
“She couldn’t have”.
You carefully continue to where her room is.
Her favorite song just ended.
Automatic replay. It starts again.
Your feet start to move slower.
Shaking. Afraid. Afraid of what you’ll find.
You get nervous. The music is draining away.
You don’t seem to hear it anymore.
All you hear, are the heartbeats in your ears.
Your blood is racing through your body.
Such a sick feeling...
You are finally at her doorway.
You slowly peer into her room.
For a moment, the air you’ve held for so long
Escapes your mouth in relief,
When you see her lying peacefully
Underneath her blanket.
But then you start to choke,
When you notice the large blood stain
Spread out on her white silky sheets.
“Oh God no!” slips harshly out of your lips.
You slowly walk to the side of her bed
Your eyes locked on her face.
Your eyes are wide opened. Your lips are so dry.
Your head is pumping with pain.
You see her sad eyes gazing out,
Into the nothing that she hated.
Dried black tears all over her face.
Lipstick covering the color of death on her lips.
Will you ever kiss those precious lips again?
You just stand there and stare,
As a regretfull tear rolls down your cheek.
You hear a whisper, breaking the silence,
“She really did...”
Comments: 21
AugmentedArt [2004-09-14 18:33:58 +0000 UTC]
Of course I would misspell tremendous and speak of vocabulary.
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DevilsKitty In reply to AugmentedArt [2004-09-23 07:12:28 +0000 UTC]
lol dont worry about it, vocab isnt about spelling... is it? lol w/e!
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AugmentedArt In reply to DevilsKitty [2004-09-23 12:47:33 +0000 UTC]
I would like to think so, but it bothers me. I'm strange, what can I say.
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DevilsKitty In reply to AugmentedArt [2004-09-25 03:33:04 +0000 UTC]
yah im strange to actually lol ur not alone
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AugmentedArt In reply to DevilsKitty [2004-09-28 17:23:55 +0000 UTC]
that is always good to know
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AugmentedArt [2004-09-14 18:33:01 +0000 UTC]
Tramendous talent for peotic stories. Nice vocabulary.
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RogueTiger [2004-07-29 16:09:11 +0000 UTC]
Wow, great poem. It really captures the ending of the girls life and the tragedy that the person feels when they find her. You're a great writer and it's so full of imagery. Bravo!
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DevilsKitty In reply to RogueTiger [2004-07-29 16:14:28 +0000 UTC]
omgosh thanx soo much!! that comment totally made my day thank u thanku!! and thanx for the fave ur sooo sweet!
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RogueTiger In reply to DevilsKitty [2004-07-29 17:15:11 +0000 UTC]
Haha, no prob. I know talent when I read it. I totally forgot that we could put poetry up here. Now that I know that no one can stop me! Muhahaha.
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DevilsKitty In reply to RogueTiger [2004-07-30 09:17:01 +0000 UTC]
thanx !!! and yeh i wont stop u i woould TOTALLY check those out!! so hurry up and put em!!!!
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Goomy [2004-07-18 11:52:13 +0000 UTC]
This poem is so well written..I only wish I could create such strong images with words like this...
This is very descriptive and very sad...
This is very nicely done~
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DevilsKitty In reply to Goomy [2004-07-19 08:58:28 +0000 UTC]
wow thanx! u made my day seriously! thats the sweetest comment!! u made me reeaally happy today!
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poi-bitch [2004-07-03 17:43:46 +0000 UTC]
if u wantmy advice keep it as it is. it's beautiful.
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DevilsKitty In reply to poi-bitch [2004-07-04 12:12:43 +0000 UTC]
aww thanks!! i just felt like theres more to add..
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Miseria-Cantare [2004-06-28 21:40:42 +0000 UTC]
A sad and honest portrayal of suicide: very powerful.
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"There is poetry in despair, and we sang with unrivaled beauty, bitter elegies of savagery and eloquence." AFI
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DevilsKitty In reply to Miseria-Cantare [2004-06-30 10:49:41 +0000 UTC]
wow cool thanx so much!!! im adding alot more to this poem tho.. im gonna change it later on...
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