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_______Introduction:
Ok, first of I must say that it is kind of hard giving feedback without knowing the technical tools used i.e. camera, lens and the different settings like ISO aperture value and such. So I might recommend some things that aren't really practicable with your equipment. So its sometimes good to reveal under what technical circumstances the photo was taken.
_______Composition:
At first sight I was indeed pretty convinced by the composition there isn't much that needs further investigation, it's simple and works quite good. The focus is set in the trees being the most complex element of the picture, more so than the mountains and the clouds. One way though to emphasize this would've been to choose a lower aperture value like let's say 2,8 or 1,7 simply to blur the background even more this way the trees would stick out even better, allowing a more distinct display of their deviant form in the context of the blurry background. It might have veiled the mountains and the clouds more and thus killed some feeling of depth in terms of landscape immersion but I think since you put the focus on the trees anyway that might have been a good way to add some more strength of purpose.
One other thing if not using the lower aperture value I would've liked a little shorter focal length. Right now I'm wondering how to situate myself in correspondence with the trees, I can't quite tell how far they are away from me or the next mountain ridge, a tad more context would've been helpful to solve this issue. Although that might just have been what you were going for I don't know.
In terms of order I'd say this is pretty stunning. 3 distinct layers of fore- middle- and background. 5 diagonals that control the viewers gaze. Not much to add here.
_______Lighting:
There is not much to criticize here either. The only thing I could think of is to use a longer exposure value to blur the clouds in contract to the trees, although this might have worked with a lower angle a little better (getting the trees against the moving clouds for example), with like 30 secsonds or even more. This would've reduced the blurry clouds to even less texture thus putting the spotlight onto the mountains and trees with their sharper edges and textures. Also the blurry clouds might have corresponded with the 3 layers of depth quite nice since they are neither in the fore nor in the middle but only in the background.
_______Random:
I must say the longer I look at it the more compositional details I see. This is definitely a well composed shot that doesn't leave much room for additions. So I hope that the few annotations I've made were at least a little helpful and what you were looking for.
~Alex
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Thanks so much for the critique, its very helpful.
My bad not to have posted EXIF of anything else useful to understand and critique my work better.
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Well, it's normal that some people prefer to keep all the technical stuff to themselves because it might distract from the artwork sometimes. So no worries. glad you appreciate my feedback.
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You say very often that there is not much room for additions: the rating gives me another impression. I think it is fair feedback, but the clouds and the background are well composed, I think. No need of lower aperture - it is a landscape and landscapes need to be recognizable.
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Well the rating usually don't really relate to what I write because I am judging what someone made out of the landscape at hand. Of course the impact on me isn't as massive as a sundown on the edge of the Namibian desert or morning rise on the Crater Lake. But I think that for what he had he did quite good, not that I would've been able to do any better.
Also, about the aperture it is always a matter of taste, I got the feeling mostly because of the name that he tried to focus on the trees rather then the altogether landscape but of course I can't look into people heads. Of course you're right saying that the landscape needs focus but I guess that is just a different approach to the same motif, I just thought he'd want to go for the trees rather then the landscape, but of course I could be wrong, no doubt.
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