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I smell like coffee bruisesand insomnia
for the night I spent weeks awake
in bed,
from 12:17 to 12:32
counting heartbeats instead of seconds
and listening to
the wind howl me reasons
to step outside.
It yelled through the blinds
where the window
doesn't latch shut
and picked up the edge
of the goose feather
hollow
to remind me
that no one else was up.
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Comments: 23
all-that-you-assume [2010-07-02 00:10:40 +0000 UTC]
Insomnia's a bitch.
I exhaust myself so I don't have time to think
Very very lovely poem.
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ejectionletter In reply to all-that-you-assume [2010-07-02 15:25:37 +0000 UTC]
isn't it though?
thank you!
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ATrueNorseman [2010-04-26 20:30:31 +0000 UTC]
i like it's tradition as an insomnia poem, reminds me a lot of the newer ones floating around in books I've read.
simply vivid, openly interpretational
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nngross [2010-04-16 06:51:14 +0000 UTC]
Your imagery is phenomenal. As a reader I this personal image put in my head after reading this. The language is also impeccable.
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ejectionletter In reply to nngross [2010-04-16 16:24:44 +0000 UTC]
thank you so much, that's lovely.
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ejectionletter In reply to palaeochannel6 [2010-04-10 23:14:33 +0000 UTC]
that makes my day!
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Makola94 [2010-04-10 09:31:38 +0000 UTC]
it's as if you wrote this for me. not for the other billion people reading this... really, it speaks to me. and the others too
oh and in the eighth line, shouldn't it be 'the winds howl' or the 'the wind howls'?
beautiful piece, either way.
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ejectionletter In reply to Makola94 [2010-04-10 23:14:20 +0000 UTC]
i will get on top of that grammatical error. thanks for pointing it out.
and thanks for the lovely comment as well. (:
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xgoldenmoonx [2010-04-10 03:55:16 +0000 UTC]
my life for the past 2 weeks, with 3 weeks more to come.
Beautiful
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ejectionletter In reply to xgoldenmoonx [2010-04-10 23:14:43 +0000 UTC]
i am sorry. i certainly hope things improve.
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xgoldenmoonx In reply to ejectionletter [2010-04-11 00:57:50 +0000 UTC]
it will at least i hope
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ejectionletter In reply to a-secret-key [2010-04-09 18:29:21 +0000 UTC]
thank you. familiar with insomnia?
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a-secret-key In reply to ejectionletter [2010-04-09 20:37:11 +0000 UTC]
very
ever since i was little. it is dreadful.
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ejectionletter In reply to a-secret-key [2010-04-09 21:15:12 +0000 UTC]
): i am sorry. it the most awful thing to experience. especially when it's chronic.
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a-secret-key In reply to ejectionletter [2010-04-09 21:17:54 +0000 UTC]
yes it gets to the point where even your mind hurts. it is the worst time to think about things because nothing is reasonable but i always find myself thinking about the negative things.
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AlwaysAnUnquietMind [2010-04-09 17:39:51 +0000 UTC]
your command of word usage is impeccable...
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ejectionletter In reply to AlwaysAnUnquietMind [2010-04-09 18:29:12 +0000 UTC]
maybe that english major is doing something after all.
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AlwaysAnUnquietMind In reply to ejectionletter [2010-04-09 19:10:36 +0000 UTC]
u don't give yourself enough credit....
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