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element-of-use — Unfortunate Surroundings
Published: 2006-10-07 17:33:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 126; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 3
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The night's cold glorious empathiseYour longing for change,
Seen deep in her eyes.
She's a gunblast breaking speed
The drug you wished for,
The chance you need.
A parrafin line sent straight to your heart
Her dense exposure,
Her knee's apart.
Exchange integrity in glance of words
Her peaceful dreams,
Her unknown world.
And now she has you kept within
The poison drunk,
The witheld sin.
That even though you were never there
How real you were,
With your skin so bare?
How could she take the time to say
That taking her,
Was all ok?
With all the truth she passes by
Because without you near,
She's a twisted lie.
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Comments: 17
yeah i do that too nice sounding words make it all ok 
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they do indeed 
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Very nice, the first line is a bit confusing but it's still awesome, a twisted tale there.
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thats awesome
i love it!
it speaks volumes... of what i dont know. heh.
nah, its a brilliant poem. i just dont know how to decribe my interpretation of it... if u no wot i mean.
its deep man...
soz, im rambling
its a great poem, well done
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thank you 
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right coz i'm so crap at constructive comments i'm gonna say what i always say lol
this is megggggggggggaaaaaaaaaaa good!!
me loves
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I understand your comments though
Thank you
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yer hehe a baby could understand my comments
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aww... babies... tehe
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This was genious! I like it. Alot! The way you've made it rhyme works very well for me.
Good Job!
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thank you
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Don't be, it really pretty! n_n
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