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elixirphoenix — Abandoning You
Published: 2007-10-25 00:11:35 +0000 UTC; Views: 82; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 2
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I cannot winThis game you dare to play
I cannot run
To grab the lion's mane
I shall leave you
To your task
Wishing that you should last
Die, die, die
That is your lie
That I should
Die, die, die
Don't bother with your lie
For it is you who will
Die, die, die
And there do I stand
Withdrawing me hand
Seeing you fall
Fall, fall off the ledge
Crashing to the rocks
Hidden 'neath the waves
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Comments: 5
I actually like the ryhthym and repetition in this poem, when I read it aloud it seems to flow quite well and the die die die is just fun to say... or is that just me???
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Nah. "Die" is fun to say. Especially if you're holding a knife, dagger, sword, or any sharp object
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Oh good, I'm glad it's not just me, I might sound like some psycho if I were all alone
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It 'tis nice. But it doesn't flow as well as some of your other poems do. I still like it, though.
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Probably doesn't flow as well since it was not written to be a single poem.
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