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Over the world came everlasting night,Which there was no light
That would provide any escape.
Like a gigantic cape
That shone with fright,
And resembled a tail of a kite
Which would blow in the wake
Of a horrible shake.
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
The Wolf looks out
And thinks that this bout
Destroys the friendships that should
Last, but now never would.
Out of the ground does sprout
Her dear friend the well fought
Raven, that now never could
Replace the past he said he would.
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
The Raven looks at
The battled hardened Wolf that
Had been his friend,
Until the bloody end
Of one of the nine lives of a cat,
That made the Raven rat
Out the destiny that didn't mend
His troubled heart from the need to fend.
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
Now at each other they do stare,
Wondering how each will fare.
The Wolf's blood is coming out
As the Raven promises not to pout
Over what the future has to bare.
Even with the Wolf's death he would not dare
To discourage fate its lout,
That the Raven considered his mate.
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
A sad look crossed the Wolf's face
As she said, "Your race
To find out what you must do
Has destroyed you.
You have set out too fast of a pace
So, you thought, there would be an escape incase
You failed and got flushed down the loo.
But now you are stuck in the poo."
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
The Raven chose his words with style.
"I'm sorry, Wolf, that I did not make you smile.
But my destiny was not for the faint of heart.
With the knowledge that the job must be done, gave me a start
To a job that is so vile
That it reminds me of bile.
So I do my dreaded part,
With the speed of a hart."
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
Now their eyes do meet
For one final feat
That will determine which feeling will last;
If their love is just the past,
Or if in their hearts will beat
A love so pure that it'll bring power to their feet
And make them leave so that it'll last,
Make them part of the heavenly cast.
And when it all comes 'round
When everything goes down
The last sound that you'll hear
Is the crying of the Wolf to the Raven
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Comments: 14
ForbiddenFears [2007-10-12 12:33:50 +0000 UTC]
Its a very good structure and a great idea. However the idea of the 'oo' didnt really sit with me
An intresting pair, the wolf and the raven. I'd rather enjoyed until they began talking to eachother. But well done anyway.
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elixirphoenix In reply to ForbiddenFears [2007-10-14 22:48:40 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, the poo sort of brings the ballad into a not so serious sense.
I felt they had to talk, these are old friends speaking for the last time.
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ForbiddenFears In reply to elixirphoenix [2007-10-15 10:06:05 +0000 UTC]
Mm.
Ah makes sense.
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youneverasked [2007-07-20 05:35:18 +0000 UTC]
Heh heh. You on the side of evil...that's funny.
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elixirphoenix In reply to youneverasked [2007-07-20 16:05:58 +0000 UTC]
You'll be one of the first ones I kill>>
XD
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youneverasked In reply to elixirphoenix [2007-07-25 03:56:41 +0000 UTC]
Make my day, fiend!
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DevilRoz [2007-07-19 04:56:06 +0000 UTC]
Obviously, the wolf is going to win. Wolves rock and are much better than your pathetic Raven. I mean, come on. All that guy ever thinks about is SEX! o. O He's as weird as you are, Jashykins! XD
Anyways, you're little ballad was nice. A bit too long for me, but I still read it. Even through your whole childish talk of "poo". =/
Jashy, I love you--you're a great pal of mine, but why is it that you rarely have that adult thought? When you do have that thought, you write beautifully, but as I had stated earlier this thought is rare for you. And why is it always "me"? "Me, me, me". o. O
~*Alec*~
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elixirphoenix In reply to DevilRoz [2007-07-19 14:38:28 +0000 UTC]
I don't see the point of always acting "adultish". And what do you mean it's rare for me to act "adultish"...*cough*
And what do you mean by:
And why is it always "me"? "Me, me, me".
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DevilRoz In reply to elixirphoenix [2007-07-20 06:02:49 +0000 UTC]
It *is* rare for you to act "adultish". I only really "love" a few of your poems when you have the open adult mind and are really looking about the world other than yourself. Most of your poems are only about you. And I hate it when you use "me" instead of "my". =-/
And the point of being an adult is to act your age. Don't you want people thinking highly of you--respecting you? And not viewing you as a child who can't take care of their self? Being responsible, having a head--I love that feeling. ^^
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elixirphoenix In reply to DevilRoz [2007-07-20 16:05:34 +0000 UTC]
I like to have funO.o
And poems are personal things, a way for me to express me feelings. Even this ballad reflects something of me. And why would I want to act me age? I want to have fun and be happy! I'm only serious when I have to be>>
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