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fallenDragonfly — Firestorm Chapter 1: Vetru's Introduction
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Published: 2018-07-10 18:55:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 868; Favourites: 70; Downloads: 2
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CRITIQUE ME PLEASE
this thing took a bit to figure out, pls tell me what could be improved so i can do better next time!! and also what's wrong, so I can keep an eye out for similar problems in future stuff. And what I did well! So I can keep it in mind for later!
Vetru meeting my Nadya (660 ), The-Kayfox 's Ashana (598) , and Kastraz 's Perseus! (1015)
WHO WANTS TO BET THAT VETRU'S GONNA SET THE PRARIE ON FIRE
Base Score: 10 AP (Shaded Illustration)
+5 AP (Full Body Bonus)
+20 AP (Full/Scenic Background)
+1 AP (Enchantment: 1 AP * 1)
+5 AP (Personal Work Bonus)
+20 AP (Other Esk Bonus: 10 AP * 2)
+20 AP (NPC Bonus)
+15 AP (Event Bonus)
+5 AP (Biome Bonus)
+40 AP (Esk Interaction Bonus: 10 AP * 4)
Total AP per submission: 141
for the esks
Base Score: 4 GP (Shaded Illustration)
+2 GP (Full Body Bonus)
+6 GP (Full/Scenic Background)
+8 GP (Event Bonus)
+2 GP (Biome Bonus)
Total GP per submission: 20
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Comments: 14
The lighting is marvelous and I like the perspective!
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Oh my gosh this is so pretty!!!
The perspective and the lighting is gorgeous!! Everything feels so warm <33
As for what I can see, the only thing really standing out is the shadows that are kind of a brown colour? Outside shadows are typically blue-ish, depending on the colour of the sky. In this case, they'd probably be a purple-blue?? Ish?
I was trying to make a quick thing to explain why it does that but I accidentally made a whole mini tutorial lmao oops here u go -> BasicLightingTut
Thanks so much for including my esk by the way ;v;! I really love how you drew him, my tall boi <3 Ehehe!! I love it so much!!
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I see what you mean! I'll have to try that next time, thank you!!
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Anytime!! ^u^ I love to help
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love the perspective and how you drew the background, so good??!
love it :0
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I love your sky!!!
It's hard to find things to improve... maybe make the shadows at the foreground a bit darker to give more depth?
(I just realised incandescaent gave the same advice but explained much better XD)
You could also desaturate a bit the colours from the ground to emphasize the colours from the sky.
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the perspective on this is GOOOORGEOUS. it's stunning, I really love the direction your art is taking! <3
I think my only critique is to use more values to suggest more depth? because the perspective suggests a huge depth, and aside from the very left side, there's not a lot of contrast in the values! so if the values toward the "back" of the painting are contrasted with the values toward the "front," then the dramatic shadows on them make more sense AND we get a better idea of depth.
But honestly? I love this. <3
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I see what you mean, thanks!
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thank you so much! I used a tonnnn of the concepts I learned from a book about perspective I borrowed from my library, and it definitely makes things look better : D
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Go you! That's excellent!
What was the book, if you don't mind me asking?
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The Art of Perspective by Yves Leblanc!
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